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Write a reviewThe story is well written, good character development and I love the description, you can really get into the story, a problem that I have with mine... The best thing about the story though is that it makes the characters seem alive. Overall, a good job.
It's too early to review the novel now since it only have two chapters. All I can say is that it has a good start. I'm interested about what happened in Bast, and what would happen to Rain. I understand that you want to explain properly the things going on in a scene, but if you can minimize it a bit, the reading flow could be more better. Maybe, if you can, properly describe how Aras and the others look like. It's kinda hard to imagine them right now. All in all, as of now, this novel really have good potential. The first two chapters is really appealing, and it gave me a good impression. Keep it up. Yo! 😄
Grammar-2? Honestly, my head hurt after reading it, because of the grammar =[ Each sentence contains too much information ****** is better =] I gave you some input in your comments section. I still have this problem personally, but if you changed from passive to active voice your novel could improve a lot. Character Design, A lazy MC? 4? could go either way... too early to tell... World background... 4? a city and an empire again to early, shows signs of being there. Told him brutal... -] enjoy
this seems like it'll be an epic drama my only issue is that you really repeat their names, like a lot. I can't tell if MC will be a shameless scoundrel or a calculating halfwit and honestly, I'd like a few more chapters before I can comment on style because it's a genuinely interesting read UWU. looking forward to more. *sets up tent*
Fantasy (Elementals) looks promising. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more.
The story is well written, good character development and I love the description, you can really get into the story, a problem that I have with mine... The best thing about the story though is that it makes the characters seem alive. Overall, a good job.
It's too early to review the novel now since it only have two chapters. All I can say is that it has a good start. I'm interested about what happened in Bast, and what would happen to Rain. I understand that you want to explain properly the things going on in a scene, but if you can minimize it a bit, the reading flow could be more better. Maybe, if you can, properly describe how Aras and the others look like. It's kinda hard to imagine them right now. All in all, as of now, this novel really have good potential. The first two chapters is really appealing, and it gave me a good impression. Keep it up. Yo! 😄
Grammar-2? Honestly, my head hurt after reading it, because of the grammar =[ Each sentence contains too much information ****** is better =] I gave you some input in your comments section. I still have this problem personally, but if you changed from passive to active voice your novel could improve a lot. Character Design, A lazy MC? 4? could go either way... too early to tell... World background... 4? a city and an empire again to early, shows signs of being there. Told him brutal... -] enjoy
this seems like it'll be an epic drama my only issue is that you really repeat their names, like a lot. I can't tell if MC will be a shameless scoundrel or a calculating halfwit and honestly, I'd like a few more chapters before I can comment on style because it's a genuinely interesting read UWU. looking forward to more. *sets up tent*
Fantasy (Elementals) looks promising. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more. Waiting for more.