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The Divine Consequence:Unrevised

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Zusammenfassung

"Is this what I wanted?... To be alone?" He muttered, watching everything from above.

At first, it had been perfect - living the male fantasy life they'd always dreamed of. But then, the dark reality had caught up with them.

On the bloodstained bed, his friend lay trembling. "I want to go home..." the broken whisper escaped cracked lips. "When will this nightmare end?" Tears carved paths through the grime on hollow cheeks.

This unknown world, this twisted paradise turned prison... would they ever uncover the truth behind their suffering?

The cause...

Somewhere in the back of his mind, a voice that sounded suspiciously like his own whispered: You already know...

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  1. DeltaT
    DeltaT Beigetragen 7
  2. ACrowThatSlumbers
    ACrowThatSlumbers Beigetragen 5
  3. MBS_41
    MBS_41 Beigetragen 5

Wöchentlicher Energiestatus

Rank -- Power- Rangliste
Stone -- Power- Stein

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DeltaT

Writing Quality - 5/5 Stability of Updates - 5/5 Story Development - 4.5/5 Character Design - 4/5 World Background - 5/5 Its good. The evil princes and malevolent entity (idk) are a little cliche. Also wish that magic was explored a little more, but its only early in the story so its excused (up to chapter 12). My main problems other than that are all just the consequences of the fast paced story (character development isn't catching up to what is happening). Thanks for the Novel.

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ACrowThatSlumbers

I rate it 5.0 because I wrote it 🗿... jk, pls support me. I don't want any job but this...😭🙏🥀💔

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