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Primogenitor In Twilight
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God has given Alex a chance to live his live in Twilight world with a anime character power to live his peaceful life.
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I always wanted a fic with combination of strike the blood and twilight , Thank you for making it true and please ,please don't drop it
he nerfed the mc ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
lost interest when mc was nerfed dont give mc a op character if your not not going to give him all the powers of said character
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its alright the grammer and spelling is AASSSS like worse then mtl but its interesting so far ig
Spelling and grammar are atrocious. The chapters are very short and the interactions are strange. Good enough for me.
the chapters are too short, you can read the whole fanfic in 5 min top, and the dialogue is like reading a French play. brief, it's not worthwhile ...
Difficult to read due to grammar and incomplete sentences. Terminologies are incorrect for example village chief should be sheriff as village chief would be closer in line with the Mayor of Forks. I would also suggest changing up how you distinguish from narration, thoughts, and speech. From what I have noticed you don't use any of the fan-fiction writing norms for them.
This is starting to become a wonderful novel. Please don't drop it, and if you can, update it faster.
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Please do consider continuing this fan fic all the twilight fan fics are always dropped I do not understand the reason and this fan fic has good potential to become something
both books by the author or awesome. jus hopenhe stays strong and keeps writing them both
the concept is interesting. the execution needs work. the story is very evident of a first time author. if the character's personality is flushed out more it could be a great story. best of luck author and keep at it. we can only get better if we try.
I'm losing brain cells as I'm reading this please author i recommend some type of spelling corrector or something it needs a lot of work other than that I like the theme of it strike the blood and twilight but I'm not gonna read this unless it's fixed I'll keep it collecting dust until then