With all the buildup I was hoping for some accident/surprise to happen tbh.
ch 31 Chapter 31: Of Tourneys and Tournaments - 112 AC
TV · Giver_Of_Crabs_165
A violet egg? So not a canon one... Unkown who hatched it as well...
ch 31 Chapter 31: Of Tourneys and Tournaments - 112 AC
TV · Giver_Of_Crabs_165
A pity that MC's third son was a female. If it were a male, House Celtigar might have gotten the hand of Helaena Targaryen. And if Viserys intends for Rhaenyra to reign as Queen, why did he chose his second son to marry Rhaena, instead of his eldest son Aegon?
ch 29 Chapter 29: On Matters of State - 112 AC
TV · Giver_Of_Crabs_165
Both Rhaenyra and Aegon had a claim, one as a chosen heir and the other as eldest male. Viserys should have not married again if he intended for Rhaeyra to rule anyways. Dragonlord Valyrians might have been doing marriage of eldest sister to eldest brother to avoid succession crisis with older sisters. When dragons exist, physical prowess would be less important so women could also rise to positions of power
"But you are more than that," Laena interjected. "You are the rightful heir to the Iron Throne."
TV · Giver_Of_Crabs_165
omg I missed this fic!
ch 26 Chapter 26: A Celebration for Men - 111 AC
TV · Giver_Of_Crabs_165
Thanks! It was time for MC to get some luck! :D With all the Macho Braces, I hope Machoke can become Top Silver, and use the evolution to Gold :3
ch 51 Chapter 50 : A Surprise Encounter
Anime & Comics · DemiGod_2972
Ouff, doing an info dump in the middle of a multiple-chapter scene is not the best. It slow downs the story a lot, you could do the info dump later
ch 19 Journey of the Stormlands (3)
TV · marcoo
If Killer B is 10 years old, it is definetely too early. I would have waited for him to be at least 14-15 years old, already Chunin-Jonin levels. And even then, the 3rd Raikage is still alive, Hachibi's rival for a lot of years, who recently "won" the fight by sealing him again. Any person would be reluctant to follow orders of your rival/enemy and the true person responsible of your incarciration. Hachibi would have mellowed out more after 3rd Raikage's death, with his son A being more soft on Killer B and their sibling relationship.
ch 47 The Attack II
Anime & Comics · readerbecamewriter
No Calm mind?
Kadabra, be sharp. You'll be the one providing support to Rhydon."
Anime & Comics · DemiGod_2972
Ouff, wasn't he just a teen? A pity.
'No...', Beef's last thoughts rattled in his lonesome head as the image of those golden irises with reptilian pupils reared its head once more.
Anime & Comics · Marine0IQ
If this really is a Death World, Healing moves like Rest and Recover are a must. Evasion/Defense as well
ch 41 Chapter 40 : The Grand Heist - First Attempt!
Anime & Comics · DemiGod_2972
What about those Pokemon that don't evolve? They can't use the push of evolution to improve their talent. Another example of the disadvantages of the Talent System, it makes single stage Pokemon very non desirable, even if they were already unpopular IRL.
ch 38 Chapter 37 : Meaning behind the gift
Anime & Comics · DemiGod_2972
I would have preferred a Gold (one stp to the highest Platinum) Pokemon tbh, as I can't grasp the value of what she gave her. This Abra must be High Gold/Platinum talent, due the spoons worth... If not, another Gold psychic Pokemon would have been better.
ch 37 Chapter 36 : Punishment? Gift?
Anime & Comics · DemiGod_2972
A Ralts please. Or two! I always liked the idea of having both a Gardevoir and Gallade hehe
ch 35 Chapter 34 : The Third Pokemon
Anime & Comics · DemiGod_2972
Not a fan of Umbreon, not because of her species, but because she doesn't fit MC's hyper offensive team nor Author's writing style. Umbreon is a mixed defensive tank. Her offensive moves are lackluster, her abilities are useless, she is not the special attacker MC needs, she can't do crowd control, she doesn't excel on the typical role of Dark types (debuffer, become annoyances, disruptive)... The worst in my opinion, you author don't excel in describing Pokemon battles, and a defensive Pokemon that focuses on outlasting her opponents is not your style of writing battles either, as you usually go for brute force, without using tactics. At least she can be a Healer with Wish+Heal Bell. I prefer you don't give MC every Eeveelution, as it will overcrowd his already full team, that already aren't being given enpugh screentime and development.
ch 88 Eevee's evolution
Anime & Comics · KK9494
Legolas' twin sword are not suitable for being an inheritable heirloom. They don't have crossguard ideal for duels, and I doubt his descendants will have the ability to use dual swords. The shorter range is not ideal either for fighting while horse/dragon riding.
ch 21 Changes
HOTD- Family above All
Book&Literature · Vencha