Oversee an event the system could manage... Missing punctuation
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
suddenly, a Golden, floating door... I don't think you need a comma in Golden,< right?
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
and right now, he did not want to miss this opportunity >>> and right now he didn't want to miss this opportunity
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
That's great!. Also sorry, I realized that I sounded a bit rude there
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
Or else me writing here is useless
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
I hope the author reads comments
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
Also the choice of the mc is too sudden and a little illogical making it feel forced
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
"He MUST hire... "I've seen this happening a mile away. Author the plot is too predictable which ruins my experience and everybody else
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
Again he's not asking
"Wait, what? I lost a level? Damn it. System home page." I asked.
Fantasy · jdbeue
That's not asking
"Use the memory skill on this skill book, Kun Peng Myriad Transformations." I asked.
Fantasy · jdbeue
Can we stop the "twitching lip" thing? its getting waaay to repetitive
Lex's lips twitched once again at the heavy criticism, but he had come to expect it now. Why was the system so much more annoying than Mary? She was so cute and adorable, the system should be more like her.
Fantasy · lifesketcher
In your- missing word
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Fantasy · lifesketcher
Come on mate, it's a joke
The Small Shop
Urban · Heavenly_Daoist_06
I see
The Innkeeper
Fantasy · lifesketcher