“Isn’t this THE same as becoming a slave of THE government instead of a slave of THE Dhovrix?” Based on the flag besides your name author, I would have thought English was your first language? It sure doesn’t seem like it.
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Fantasy · thewhitesnow
Ok, so a skeleton, really? You make him a night elf, a relatively unexplored race at least when it comes to MC’s and full with exciting possibilities and potential. And you make his “battle form” a cheap ghost rider knockoff? You make him depend on an artifact for power? Couldn’t you have come up with something a little less chuuni?
ch 21 Back To Normal
Fantasy · Resurgent
So you made the mc struggle against a bug he could easily stomp on if he used his full strength, just to do some world building? That kind of clumsy writing is the kind of thing that pulls me right out of any fantasy world. At least mention it in the character’s mind or something that he is hiding his abilities for some reason or another otherwise it makes the fight feel very artificial and forced.
ch 144 Roy vs Noah (2)
Fantasy · Crimson_ink
Sigh… 😩, so cringe. Gauntlets are NOT weapons. They don’t increase your fighting range, they don’t act as force multipliers, they only make your punches harder. They are barely better than a naked fist. Authors need to stop this stupid trend of using spiked gauntlets for their MC just because it looks ”edgy”
"Show me gauntlets with spikes, the ones with best endurance." Varian said.
Fantasy · _Transcendent
One puuuuuuuuunch!! Wait wrong story😂😂
ch 14 Can't feel a thing...
Fantasy · LivingVoid
Maybe you’ve heard this before author but elbow length black gloves are extremely feminine looking, try a google search and all the models using them are women, not to mention the guys that are using them are into bondage and stuff. I really just can’t picture the mc using them without looking ridiculous, sorry I’m a pretty visual guy.
ch 35 Chapter 35: A Glove
Fantasy · Belg4r
Thanks for replying! I wrote another comment on a place that was confusing but you can ignore it. Really loving the story so far!
ch 35 Call My Name...
Eastern · Nate_Quinn
The “would” here makes it unclear as to wether this is somethIng that happened or will happen in the future. Considering the second sentence, it happened already so the sentence should read “they hit it off” or “they had hit it off”
A few exchanged words and the two would hit it off, maybe they were not best friends yet but at least they could coexist.
Eastern · Nate_Quinn
Author, quick tip: Please stop using “He would do this” and go back to using “He did this” The “would”makes it hard to ascertain if something actually happened or if it might happen,making it confusing as hell to read. Other than that this is one of the better written books in this website so keep up the great work!!
ch 35 Call My Name...
Eastern · Nate_Quinn
Quick question... Isn’t our MC an unrivalled swordsman in this world? Why is he fighting barehanded and even using his last resort technique instead of using his sword will? or even combine undying wrath with his swordsmanship as the way I see it, it’s just a general amplification of power and should not interfere with his swordsmanship at all. The mc complained about not having a sword about 10 chapters ago and now he has one but doesn’t use it? Please be more consistent with the MC’s fighting style.
ch 69 Red Eyed Hound
Eastern · Resurgent
2.5 meters in diameter is waaaay too wide to be considered “concentrated” given that it’s both wider and taller than the person casting it.
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Fantasy · Redsunworld
Author, the ash created by burning wood is light grey, I think the word you are looking for is soot not ash, also, this could have been avoided with a more specific description from the beggining.
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Fantasy · Redsunworld
Ok where do I start? The good, let’s start with that. The story is well edited and there are few typos or grammatical errors. The writing quality is decent. That out of the way, let’s move to the bad stuff. The story is very derivative, nothing wrong with that per se, as often many of the stories I like are inspired by something else. The problem here is that this story is inspired by too many things. It feels like the author is taking elements from every novel, manga or anime they have ever comsumed, and cramming them in whether they make sense or not. You can feel it in the way they write that they change their mind quite often about what they would like their story and characters to be. The story feels like one of those games you played as a child where you came up with a character that had x powers and your friend one upped you and then you had to come up with something more outrageous to one up him and so increasingly escalating the nonsense until the character you came up with was ridiculous. The MC in particular feels like a caricature, he starts alright then adopts increasingly cartoonish behaviour, it’s fine for a character to have character flaws but it can reach a point where the character is just a plain unlikeable collection of tired tropes. He is extremely greedy yet incredibly cheap which makes you wonder wtf he does with his money. He doesn’t care about his appearance and has to be forced to buy clothes. He constantly picks his nose and ears in public (Who the f**k does this outside outside of anime) He has always dreamed of being a magus and yet he disrespects and pisses over any tradition and culture magi might have (why did he want to be one in the first place?) He always wanted to attend clover academy, yet he sleeps in all his classes. He’s always drinking and is constantly drunk. These issues are mostly nitpicks that make the MC hard to empathize with but that is not the main problem. The main problem is the inconsistency in the MC’s characterization. When he enters the secret realm and leaves that group of magi to die because they’re strangers, I didn’t like it because up to this point there was nothing in his story that would have made him so callous, but it was fine because I don’t expect him to be a white knight, but when he later mind controls a captive group of magi to fight to their deaths as a distraction so that he could have a slightly easier time looting I was dumbstruck. As I said, I never expected a goody 2 shoes but that is just evil, and came out of nowhere. The main character’s personality did a 180 without any reason. One chapter he is depressed about having killed a vampire and is risking his life every night without rest for over a month to protect innocent people and 50 chapters and a timeskip later he pulls this sh*t, willing to sacrifice people to have a slightly easier time of it, wtf happened?. Lastly, the author made magic too inconvenient to use, having a bunch of stupid requirements, why would you create a world of magi and an intricate magic system just to have the mc fight like a typical xianxia mc with kicks and punches? Easy, writing magic battles with a bunch of different effects and requirements is too hard and the lazy writer decided it would be easier for the MC to kick and punch stuff. Why would Ichigo learn kido when he can getsuga tenshou the s**t out of everyone?. The same is happening here, tne writer made magic so inconvenient that it barely makes sense for anyone to use it.
Greatest Legacy of the Magus Universe
Fantasy · Esenel