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It’s a really good story so far the only thing that sucks is the inconsistency on the updates.

Look this story is good, not the best grammer and clunky but it’s good. There is only one nigga saying negative shit don’t let it detour you from trying the fic

Shit mc- mc just smokes weed and is a loner, those are his sole defining factors. Weed is mentioned a lot like wtf, smoking is something that’s casual and yet the author brings it up a lot. Story development- ya so there is the usual girls fall for no reason trash you’d see in most fics but here the mc is weird about it too, he asked Leah’s dad to date? Why, that isn’t traditional it’s extra, dating is to get to know the person. Marriage is where you’d ask the dad. He promises Jessica that he’d date/marry he if she wants in 5 years. His whole relationship with rose is just weird af. There’s a system btw, ya I know why. It’s mentioned a few time here and there but there isn’t really any point in it, it’s like it was added but the author either forgot or has it as an afterthought. Either way the fic is shit, complete garbage.

It’s writen well, the updates aren’t frequent, the story development is shit ( the story has plot holes that are massive and I’ve asked questions about and didn’t get a response on so development is slow af also) character development is alright like it’s Percy so how can you fuck it up so, the world backround is meh as I said plot holes, a lot of which revolve around the worlds lore and Percy Jackson lore.

Ya no the mc is bad, the dialogue is immature. The backstory for the mc is shit. like show no tell but the author tells everytime like when mc went murderous the author added a line that said oh he must have had something bad happen to him in the past. Like wtf if you want some stupid backstory to add to the plot you develop it through actions not hinting from another characters dialogue. Overall this is a immature work that I wouldn’t recommend to actually literature enthusiast. If you’re here for trashy fanfic then go ahead you might enjoy it.

Ya so the story isn’t special at all, the mc is bland with no real character. At least he doesn’t have some backstory that somehow affects the plot like other fics. So the powers are strange and the author doesn’t know enough on the lore of tdg to make the story amazing. The author added a foreign character ie a demon frkm demon slayer, so ya that’s fucking retarded. The character is bitchy instead of thankful for the mcs help, and is saying shit out of nowhere like the mc pulled out talk no jutsu. He introduced him by saying he’s talented with speed with him being faster than a silver rank fighter. Which is fucking absurd and just impossible which destroyed the world lore. Anyway I don’t see it going anywhere good from this point I dropped at chapter 14.

Ya I get bots they spam good comments so you don’t know how bad the fic is. This novel is bad, the mc immediately does the whole copy other world manga songs and shit for money, and goes through some tough shit and yet doesn’t mature at all. Btw the mc is reincarnated so he should be mentally above 20 and yet he acts like a 8 year old. Who honestly writes these characters and think damn he’s tough. Like the mc cries out for attention like naruto. the mc took a egg to the face and a knife to the arm and laughed it off saying he doesn’t care what people think of him. This scene is particularly bad since it’s at the sports festival surrounded by hero’s and the students are separated by the crowd by a massive margin at this point and yet someone no only manages to get there but harass an underage student twice physically. Especially after the previous villain incident. The author also made an abusive father who then left him and now it’s revealed that he was forced to leave or some shit and he’s actually a good guy, like wtf. Anyway this fanfic is a mess.

Ya this was one of my favorite novels for a long time but the author killed the novel at around chapter 180 and it died for sure at 208 the plot is so bad at this point like there was signs early on with how bad the mc was but the plot is so annoying and tedious and the authors is making up random shit at this point to call plot. I haven’t even made it to the second game start yet since it’s got so bad.

Ya no im stalking you, what ever happend to your series?