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A normal college student of blue star accidentally obtained a system fragment due to traffic accident while saving his friend he thought he was dead but when he opened his eyes he was in a movie with mission of collecting the system fragments which are in different world's
First world: Mummy world
Second world: Resident Evil world
Third world: ?????
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I couldn't make it past the first chapter. Grammar and punctuation are atrocious.
This is beautiful , the sheer amount of quality is like fine caviar to my taste buds
So I like the premise of the story. But there are no punctuations like fullstop or comma. So it's like you are reading one continuous sentence. Also I don't know if the Author wants to improve or not but he should really consider this stuff. I mean adding a fullstop after a complete sentence is a basic requirement to be an author.
I couldn't make it past the first chapter with how god awful the flow of reading went. I felt like I was reading an elementary school students fantasy story. Grammar is hardly used or just used incorrectly, and the sentences are hard to comprehend due to how unnecessary some of the lines are. I feel like the author was adding more words to a sentence to make it longer. (EX from ch1: My name is Alex Walker. I was a college student who led a normal life, except that I'm an orphan. Who grew up in an orphanage until school and moved to college dorms for college and doing part-time jobs for money. It all worked out well until today) this could have been way simpler as this instead. (EX: My name is Alex Walker, I was a full-time collage student getting by through part-time jobs. I grew up as an orphan, so there was little money to fund my living expenses, so I opted to live in the collage dorms. It all worked out well, until today, that is.)
Everyone else: "You have superpowers?!" Mc: "Yes I have powers but that is not important right now." Everyone else: "ah yes you right"
El sentido del humor es malisimo, la calidad de la historia también el protagonista es repelente y te llega a entrar ganas de matarlo y nada tiene sentido en la historia no volvería a leer esta "novela" por llamarla de alguna manera y no volvería a leer la por nada del mundo parece un fanfic de un mal fanfic chino.
You get a truly OP MC for the first 2 worlds. Then at chapter 60 or around there. He suddenly acts like hes 15 and like a soy boy cuck and starts trying to have a relationship with a 15-17 year old girl. Even though its stated hes at least mid 30's. VERY NOT COOL! He goes from OP awesome fun guy to crying and bowing before a woman who is almost 20 years younger then him. And this is supposedly a DRAGON GOD?!?!?!?! This along with the badly written dialog I could get over because the author is not a native english speaker but along with how the story is going its too much to take.
Absolute garbage between the grammer the useless mc and the rushed writingthe fact the MC is just another garbage sideshow Chinese MC this is basically the movie's being copy and pasted and the MC adding obnoxious childish comments save your time and brain cells and just ignore this fic
character is stupid and gets needed every single world after getting a buff, absolutely ridiculous. Grammer bad.The story development can basically be represented as the flash with it basically being sped through with no lasting moments.
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I will just say MC is not the MC, he just follows the story and original MC's like a NPC, no character development.
If I am being honest here it feels like a kid is writing this novel. But for some reason it works for me. Not my fav novel out there but still a good read though
No me gusta juzgar tan pronto, pero solo desde el primer capitulo la lectura ya es incomoda. Parece como si me estuviese contando un resumen rápido de los hechos que se supone e están ocurrieron do en tiempo de narración, lo cual quita toda la inmersión y sabor a la historia
I would dare say this fanfic is gold except for the mc being way too childish and acting immature at every turn. His actions and op powers makes him an object of fear and headache for the more paranoid people inspite of being a relatable, funny and likable character. To be fair if mc met batman in the dc verse the latter would get a migraine large enough to put him into a coma indefinitely.
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I like the idea and all,but the grammar is kinda annoying ocd wise but if I look past it with its spelling mistakes (aka it needs capital letters and commas),other than that its nice to read.
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1- The character is unnecessary for the plot, he follows the protagonists as an npc and does system missions as a servant. 2 - He tell all the powers to the 'friends', who, by the way, made friends in just one month. 3- In the first arc he is already invincible. 4- The protagonists discover the power of the MC, but they act lightly as if it were something normal after two dialogues, like.... Protagonists: WHAT! Are you immortal and can you break giant rocks with one punch? Him: That's right, but it's not important now, we have to defeat that villain before he destroys the world! Protagonists: Oh that's right, I forgot! The character has dull strength, no enemy is really a risk to your life. It's the typical Chinese MC who gets everything chewed up from the system, be it power, money or experience and still doesn't feel good because the plan can, even if it's 0000.1%, go wrong. I think the story is a good repository of ideas, but the MC lacks any personality. He just goes with the flow and I was waiting for him to go off the rails. With all that strength and looks, he lives like a nomad, who doesn't really want to experience the beauties the world has to offer. And the world of cinema has so much to offer... And the... Timeskip. Ten years have passed, the protagonists got married and now live in a mansion with their son, while Alex looks like he just came out of a cryogenic tube. Nothing has changed and we don't know what he did in that time.
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