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2022-06-19 入りました Global

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Way too fast paced, bro needs to slow down and put more effort in world + character building but an OK fanfic idea if you like op main characters. If you scale the MC's growth more in the beginning you don't need to make as drastic changes to the original plot which makes for easier story telling a more realistic MC as his personality isn't as detached, especially if the world building and dialogue is properly fleshed out. The MC should also have a clear goal as again it makes for easier storytelling and removes the need for an OC to be introduced suddenly to "humble" the MC it usually detracts from the writing and detaches the reader as the story isn't as griping with random plot points being added it just feels like lazy writing to cover your own faults and make a believable challenge for the MC. If you want to add a overpowered OC give reasons on why they are there (how the MC's butterfly effect caused this) and also make sure their existence is believable and not some strange amalgamation of 3 random Naruto clans that have no relevance for a throwaway character. If you wanted the MC to be challenged you should have made him roughly Haku's level but still arrogant to make good character growth when he either looses or wins barely with a injury or hurt comrade in the wave arc. Alternatively you could have left the MC strong but made him more caring so suddenly in the middle of a fight he was dominating he finds out/is tricked into thinking they killed his friend/loved one so that he either ends up loosing control and killing his friend/opponent or freezing up and getting pummeled in a single moment, All things considered this is a good fanfic idea and the grammar + writing quality are better than 45% of fanfics on this site so keep writing and give it your best i look forward to seeing anything else you may write.

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crack fic that takes itself seriously. power scaling is abysmal 100x lightning speed after 4 years, MC is 12 at this point. no consistent character development with no dialog that is either thought out or at lest reviewed before posting. writing quality needs work but the idea wasn't too bad if a bit cliche.

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