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"What you do in life, Echoes in Eternity."
The System, who goes by the code name, Thirteen, defied the System God in order to give his previous Hosts’ the chance to change their Fates.
Unfortunately, he was killed by his Father, the System God, and was sent to the world of Pangea to struggle like the Cannon Fodders that he fought so hard to protect.
Armed with his knowledge as a System, Thirteen vowed to change not only his Fate, but the Fate of others whose destinies were tied up with him.
In a world torn by power and corruption, a fallen System will bring out a symphony of change, or lead it to its destruction.
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I've read the first 154 chapters , and here's what I think: Right now, I don't have any criticisms to dedicate to this novel, because in my opinion, it's proceeding at a good pace that doesn't easily bore the reader. There are small hints of inspiration from other novels, but they are small enough to overlook. The main character is intelligent and interesting, as are the side characters of the novel. The plot is interesting and quite unique in its genre. Also, regarding the world-building, for this number of chapters, I would say it's quite good.In conclusion: it's a novel worth spending time on, and it's good enough for me to spend some money to read the private chapters (which honestly I've only done with just 2 novels so far).P.S. Of course, I don't expect everyone to agree with me on the points listed above, as it is also a matter of taste.
yup that's another great book by elyon can't wait for more chapters... TO ALL THE READERS : this is an elyon fan readers who read/is reading his all books form completed to the ones in progress and i promise you won't be disappointed in any of his works !!! try his novels and enter -- yuns[img=Loving it]
Mixed feelings about this novel. It should be good, as the premise should be interesting, but it’s not (for me). I just can’t take the story seriously. Too many immersion breaks, too many „basic“ jokes, like tf is a “copyright god” and the “mafia boys”. Weird language sometimes, like you read in a instagram section. You feel like a 10th grader wrote this sometimes. The villains are two-dimensional, like always the monarchs and gods are stupid and only the MC came up with the most basic of solution and that makes him a genius. You just can’t feel anything for the characters.
It’s elyon what do you expect? Obviously 5 stars, best author on webnovel. If you don’t read you are missing out, as his works are all amazing be it wwi, rwtss or heavens gate they are all amazing and ely’s novels are becoming better and better. So yuh it’s a must read.
Well, the first thing i want to clarify is that , i have read many novels, manuha, manhwa etc.., so i will be giving my review based on what i feel, i dont think i am an expert in this at all but, i think i have spend a lot of time reading stuff , so i have enough data to atleast analyze in detail. I wont write too much as english is my 3rd language and i am not too good in it, i will just put in points. Some points might have Spoilers. And one more thing - i have read till 700chps, so i and not giving points based after 50 or so chps What i loved - 1. MC family - MOM , DAD and little sisters interactions are good but MC big brother and sister feel weird, idk they dont do a shit and are their just for the sake of the story,No role and feel blank. 2. Character writing - author is talented in expressing and writing characters . Many characters feel alive, and i can feel the connection with them, but the problem is for every reader what matter most to them is the MC ,which is so poorly written- rather than him i can take 10 other side character names who can become the MC of this story. 3.story flow - i loved the pacing of the story, not too slow nor too fast 4.writing - i think author is wwy good in writing and expressing what he feels Thats all what i liked What i hated - 1. Power system - its just for show , idk whats going on, the top level monarch cant do a shit but suddenly a group of ragtags children having 5 level below them are much more overpowering, i get the idea that MC gave them skills but than what is the actual point of ranks 2. MC is so unlikeable - he cant do a shit, everytime he goes and instigate a monster 15 levels above him and than start collecting allies like pokemon to fight for him. 3. No logic behind MC and monsters interaction - he killed a monster whole family and the next few chapers the monster becomes so loyal to give his life for MC. 4. At first author wanted to portary that MC is weak and he will make strategy to fight monsters. - i mean its ok, iwas fine to hear it, - but in every situation all he do is just start running and beg his ally to help him, was the whole strategy part to just beg to his allies 5. The whole avtar concept which the children get after killing monster- its too much brain dead, many grandmaster are needed to fight a level 5 strong monster, at one side and on the other side 13 year old kids get a level 4-5 monster avtar in solteria , lol whats going on 6. Romance - one of the most dissapointing point, author just skipped this part almost but still thought to insert stupid ecchi scenes( like night time hugging scenes with 2 girls and lingeri etc) , i mean i dont hate ecchi scenes but if their is no romance then whats the point of them. MC dont like the girls while the girls also dont like MC in a romantic way, but they all doing ecchi scenes at night with no problem, just cuz MC gave them few skills . The whole thing is so illogical and retarded 7. World people are so dumb - everyone is fighting with long weapons like sword and spears but only MC 69th battalion is so smart to have guns , everyong else are so stupid to go and fight with sword and then die lol 8MC brain is empty and his personality is so much going left and right - he kills a lot of hight level monsters after begging and collecting allies then making them fight. But for almost 600 + chapters he cant deal with a stupid monarch who killed his host in previous life, and tells his family to lay low, and wait for right time. One side he is raring to fight a majin king in a few seconds on the other side he is laying low for 15 years to kill a stupid monarch, wtf is going on Conclusion - i can write maybe a 50 more things what i hated but its too much hassle, so i wont Just few words for author - wasted potential ,
It’s an enjoyable story, but has some very questionable logic “He had been to many worlds where slavery was rampant, so he didn't think of the Slave Traders as bad guys. In fact, one of his Hosts was also a Slave Trader, who sold slaves to people, whom he believed would take good care of them. There were always two sides of a coin. Depending on how one looked at it, there were many stories where slaves actually had a happy ending, and found joy despite the circumstances they were in.” As it turns out, when I beat someone half to death, and poisoned them for a year, that person was quite thankful when I decided to let them sit at the dinner table instead of the prison filled with glass shards…perhaps the system has never heard of the terms Stockholm syndrome and suspension bridge effect. This has been thirteen’s largest character defect in my opinion
Although the book is in it's starting phase, I am loving it. Also, Author I have read all of your books and a big fan of them
One word 'PERFECT' I just can't think of anything else . After RWTSS and the strongest necromancer novel it's my third read from Elyon and I am utterly satisfied . SPOILER AHEAD ********* It was fun knowing elyon's opinion of heroes , villains , cannon fodders and extras through this novel . MC doesn't hate heroes as he knows realistically it's fate at fault and he just is devastated how he had to lose his loved ones because of them not possessing the same cheat of a power . The part where Roland confronts Zion after his defeat was a very delicate part and I was totally scared of what is to happen next but as I've read it farther I am not that sad at the end of the day he and Roland can't stay under the same roof . But still would love to see Stella as his 4th harem member . Kekeke Please write a novel on sun-wu-kong's rise alongside thirteen , really wanna see it , Keep up this saga bro .
I've been following Elyon since RWTSS and he hasn't disappointed his readers even once since then. The Strongest Necromancer of Heaven's Gate, Strongest Warlock and now this one are all freaking masterpieces. I was very intrigued and excited when I read the synopsis that a System will be the mc this time. It's just a breath of fresh air and absolutely brilliant. You won't find a problem with the writing quality or his updating stability. The characters are extremely well written and are in no way one dimensional. The world building is incredible as always. I think unless you don't read his works, you will not be able to appreciate the sheer amount of thought, care, love and hard work our beloved author has put in every damn time. Now stop reading my review and go read the novel lol. P.S. Elyon bro, please create a discord server for us readers to engage.
I love how you will never ever find a 2 or 3 star review in any of Elyons novel. While master class novels like shadow slave and Lord of myserties also have dozens of bad review, but not in any of Elyons novel through some "Miracle"
A really great novel which hopefully will entertain me for a long time! Elyon is a very talented, and one of my - if not the most - favorite author. The story revolves around the System of cannon fodders and his fight against fate, the God of Systems and some stinky old men. Systems POV is an entertaining novel with a high writing quality, excellent Caracter Design and a well thought out World Background. Elyon is updating this novel regularly, and it seems that he is able to hold his update schedule. if something is endangering the update sability, the readers get warned beforehand, so no one is kept in the dark. the only thing i personally dislike is his way of foreshadowing at the end of many chapters. please consider that this is not necessarily bad but a matter of taste :) thanks for your time. Enjoy this unique novel and congratulations to Elyon for creating this great story. I whish you good luck and all the best for this years writers contest! I'm rooting for you <3
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The novel itself seems well written. Only concerns are a few things a commentator named slyeye brought up. For example, how the mother talks like kids can't be normal anymore but they weren't alive 300 years ago, so life like this should be normal to them. It feels like a lot of modern thoughts are still being used without considering how people in this world would think, not really what they would, but how and why. Alternatively, this novel was not what I was looking for either. I thought it was going to be directly in the POV of a system as a system, rather then a system in a players body with lets be honest, a system. If it changes, then feel free to comment the chapter it does so I can skip to that because that's what I was looking for and if you know a novel that does that, please say so.
writing quality is without question good, Eylon is known for it. overall everything is good, but I have some issues with it. currently at chapter 73 and the number of things that feel "inspired" by shadow slave...is a lot. dream gate/dimension gate; echos/avatars; first nightmare/first wandering (they even occur on the same day-winter solstice, longest night of the year); beast cores/soul cores (specifically the manor in which they are used to rank up); initial location for first wandering - hellhole that no one/almost no one survives, with everyone trying to find a way out/complete a quest to leave. pulling ideas from other writing is not bad and relatively normal, it's just the amount and seemingly sole source in such a small amount of chapters makes it feel very blatant.
I was expecting more. The story isn't progressing in an exciting direction so far. The MC has too few challenging obsticles in his path for the theme. The drive behind the main character is very tacky. I find the MC’s interactions with the main antagonists to be immature and cringeworthy(maybe it should be like that if he's an inexperienced kid, but I don't like the time-hardened system acting like that). The intrinsic logic behind the narration is often immature. There is a lot of rushing through infodump after infodump, which leaves events and characters of the story feeling trivial and impersonal. In many scenes, the writing style lacks sufficient description and immersiveness. Don't get it wrong, it’s not a terrible read, just not great. To sum it up, it's readable and feels original, but it could and should be so much better.
A decent take on what it would be like for a system to be the main character, instead of a supporting actor. Although, the story felt rushed and too monotone, unforgiving with the lack of emotions present.
There's nothing to see here, its just an Elyon fan leaving behind his 5 star review.And people should read this novel cause a system as MC is something new since all systems are meant to help MC grow stronger.
so I'm kinda wondering if this book is harem please answer because I want to know ASAP pls Idk what else to write to fill the 140 character
After o finished reading my first Elyon book i just had An realization that I needed more of this and i havent been able to stop since
A true gem among gems. At first, I was not planning to read it because of the harem tag, but I'm glad that I did. The story is fun and easy to read, and the humor in the latest chapters makes me clutch my stomach each time I read them. Overall it's a great story that makes me look forward to more updates