This really needs an edit. The grammar and choice of words are poor in many of the sentences; an example is when mentioning the events of using a "chopper" to get to a "port." Grammar aside, helicopter and harbor for the choice words would fit better when describing events occurring instead of slang words like chopper. First impressions are important.
something else do all wraiths have this system and access to this store?
[You lack any actual metabolism that is required to clot the wound and start a slow 'natural' healing. You either use the health pack or keep the Injury as it is. Bleeding and leaking your Eldritch essence.]
Debauchery of a Soul-Eating Wraith
Fantasy · NatePrince
still think because it's a form of energy and seems to be maybe related to his soul there should be a way to prevent excess loss of that energy. That ultimately its a matter of control of that energy which he currently doesn't possess. These packs would be best suited in emergency cases to recover what was lost. which could affect his strength for having that portion of energy missing.
[You lack any actual metabolism that is required to clot the wound and start a slow 'natural' healing. You either use the health pack or keep the Injury as it is. Bleeding and leaking your Eldritch essence.]
Debauchery of a Soul-Eating Wraith
Fantasy · NatePrince
should of gone by stage he's in. 3rd order should need a 3rd order med pack and so on. As he gets stronger would imagine he would be made up of a denser or higher quality eldritch energy. Meaning what would be needed to heal him would be more demanding as he gets stronger. Who knows maybe once he hits the 4th order the cost will increase just something to think about.
1000 for an injury that's bleeding? That's a ripoff!'
Debauchery of a Soul-Eating Wraith
Fantasy · NatePrince
not going to lie this could pass for a short haired girl in an anime lol, very feminine.
Everyone in the room, everyone besides the rejoicing mother still embracing her son, saw as Evian's brown hair began to change to grey.
Debauchery of a Soul-Eating Wraith
Fantasy · NatePrince
so multiple reincanations in the same body, young master trope, child hood friend being guided by a spirit in her head, someone else having a legendary sword, useless elders with a father that abandoned his family. Forced engagement that causes issues. Did I miss anything like come on this is just a gag at this point.
Long Tian came across this in his previous life and decided to perform it to perfection when he did not get any techniques from the family to practice.
Getting a Sugar Mommy in Cultivation World!!
Eastern · Odayaka
appreciate the thought being put into the plot curious to see if these events will have a effect on Noah's character. Be a waste to put this effort into a flashback for a dead character.
yup hope hope this is the last of this cliche but some how I doubt it.
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original When Chaos Comes
The cycle continues, with a new world being thrown into the mix. The story takes place on Noveria, a newly evolved planet. How will this power affect the lives of those who make up this world? The start of the story will place a heavy emphasis on slice-of-life elements. I want to fully explore and show the connections forming between the characters. Action will play a large role in the story. It will just take a bit of time. My goal is to create a detailed world with a unique set of characters. .0 Chs 1 컬렉션
Are you using an app like grammary? Copy a draft of your writings to that, then sort though the errors it prompts you with. That should solve like 80% of the issues your chapters are having.
Shards of the Broken Heart
Fantasy · Grispera