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That's fair point, and tbh the longer this fic becomes, the less valid my criticism is. Like at the moment, that part of the story accounts for half of what's available, but if you get to chapter 80 or something, it's not really an issue. But I can only review what's currently available. I also just wanted to say that in case it didn't come through before, I think you're doing a really good job. This is currently one of my favourite stories on the app, and I'm looking forward to the rest of the story.

I do like this novel. There are some aspects of it that I personally dislike, but I think other people would like. It's a crossover work that includes AU elements for that to work, and I think the blending of the worlds is pretty well done, definitely from a power system view. The part I dislike personally is that for at least for the first 30 chapters or so, it's more of an OC story than AU if you get what I mean. Most fanfiction are very canon compliant, which is something I don't like. Then, there are about 3 different levels of AU fics. Level 1 is labelled as AU but is really still a canon retelling with a new character involved. Level 2 is still based on canon events initially but eventually goes into another direction based on the accumulation of small changes. Level 3 has 2 different routes, where either they have the characters in a different setting or setting itself has a lot of massive differences. An OC story, in my view, is essentially a story that's not really relevant to any of the source material's plot, and that can fit any of those categories. And that's where I fell this story land mostly so far and that's fine within itself but I felt from both the synopsis and the first chapter the aim for the story was the crossover not random unnecessary drama. Like again, I'm not saying it wasn't well written, but that is not the perception that this novel gave as to what it was going to be. That's changed after around chapter 30, which I do like, but it then makes all those previous chapters essentially a very long prologue. Like everything up till he gets to Japan. The structure of the novel is weird because of that. If you were writing a completely new story, just using the setting or because of the crossover, multiple settings, that would be fine, but then why are you now interfering with the plot. And if the wasn't the intention, then you essentially have unnecessarily long prologue that could have easily been cut down by half if not more. With that being said, it's not like it was uninteresting, it definitely was, and the writing quality is very high quality, and besides the Lord of Mysteries aspect not being that well explained in comparison, the actual crossover worlds have been pretty well explained in how everything fits in together. I'm definitely going to keep on reading, and I recommend it to anyone who sees this to give it a go.

This is a really good story so far. How the worlds are combined so far has been really interesting. The only real negative that I have is chapter length / pacing. Essentially, chapters, even though they are average length for the app, feel short. It might be because of the AI translation, idk, but sometimes chapters can feel stop, then start if you get me. In chapter 43, we are now about to reach Hogwarts. It's generally not a great sign for Harry Potter works. I find if not at Hogwarts by ch10, then there is an increasing chance of the work being cropped The story itself is good quality, and I am looking forward to it continuing. Have a good day.

I usually don't think fanfics should be rated for world background unless significant changes are made. As this merges another story into the background, I think it derves it. Everything else is great. The only problem being that the poster isn't the original author, so they might want this taken down.

I've recently read all of your fics besides the dropped one, and honestly, this is the one I liked the least. I just can't get over the reactions or, more accurately, non-reactions of everyone to his eating people. Maybe if the setting was after Endgame, you could somewhat believe it, but at this point in the timeline, the reactions seem completely out of character. Honestly, with the reincarnation part at the start of the fic, if you just make it something like, people are more inclined to be accepting of his abilities. Although it would be hamfisted, it makes more sense.Honestly, that's the only problem. Grammatically, there's basically no issues. The writing style is very engaging, and character work outside of the above-mentioned problem is really good. While there are obvious wish fulfilment aspects, that's true in any fanfic, and here it's done in a really readable and digestible manner. Overall, it's very good and you're a good author because I like your other works even better. The only other possible note is to be careful of burnout it looks like you're updating 4 stories at the moment, and while as reader, I love all the content, trust me as an audience we much prefer slower updates and less stressed author that completes their work, than one who uploades until they can't and then stops posting altogether.Take care of yourself.