Show, don’t tell. This kind of statement dampens the mystery surrounding their future relationship. We already knew there might be potential conflict based on previous writing, now it’s solidified.
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Fantasy · HideousGrain
Doesn’t seems likely seeing as he literally has to scan his surroundings to “see”.
Especially because he was so focused, Nial didn't even realize that there were more than a hundred dead-tired, and injured young Originals lying on the ground around the portal.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
Sounds safe and totally not endangering your prodigies… again.
The military didn't provide many pieces of information. Rather, they wanted the participants of the Teradan military camp to figure out everything by themselves.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
Really? No one ever came up with this conclusion? Doesn’t make sense. Also, that’s all he’s giving her in terms of information? That’s like nothing.
Miranda chose to believe Nial's words. There was no reason to do so, but if she were to be honest with herself, it was the first time a theory about the dungeon portal's existence and creation made somewhat sense.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
I don’t know how many times this needs to be mentioned, these chapters feel like word padding.
Yet, his physical strength had been enhanced to a much higher state owing to the Curse he had bound to his mana core.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
Adopted?
That was because my mother ad-...I mean, when my mother and I lived in a different shelter I learned a lot.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
Just dump them out if you need space later, like what?
But after thinking about it, it was likely for them to encounter a few dozen groups of monsters on their way to find the hidden basement of the Teradan military camp.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
This entire chapter could be summed up in a couple of words: ”I’m glad I had the procedure done, my past self would struggle/die”.
ch 200 Chapter 200 – Accumulated Power
Fantasy · Warmaisach
I’ve felt the same way.
ch 144 Chapter 144 – The Night
Fantasy · Warmaisach
Kai?
However, they had to leave the crater and return to the Labyrinth sooner or later — not only to escape the black water, but also because there was nothing to hide behind on this vast muddy plain. If any flying Nightmare Creature decided to attack them from above, the cohort would have no defense against it.
Fantasy · Guiltythree
Does that justify killing another student?
'Don't let your past ruin your future.'
Fantasy · Warmaisach
I don’t like the MC tbh. Hoping he gets beat to death.
ch 124 Chapter 124 – Crossroads
Fantasy · Warmaisach
Kira doesn't have that ability.
Neither of them was tired, but they did not go back to the cave and remain on the platform. Kira needed to expel the pollution on her body and Zatiel had to wait for Ezequiel and Sophia.
Fantasy · Redsunworld
It’s the only spell you’ve bought, it has such a specific description, and you need the chip to tell you?
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Fantasy · Redsunworld
He had already started reading though?
Then, Shang opened the rulebook.
Fantasy · Warmaisach
Incredibly stupid not to heal the man. Not to mention the morality of it, he just wasted a potential free laborer.
ch 69 (69) No Room for Doubt
Fantasy · Ullyr
These interactions.... are unrealistic and kind of destroy the story tbh.
"But why? I just showed you kindness by letting you into my home and you want to repay me with this ungrateful attitude!" He voiced out loudly.
Fantasy · TimVic
Does a character really require a love interest?
ch 366 Lessons of History
Shadow Slave
Fantasy · Guiltythree