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It's the problem with extremist political views on both sides. The pendulum of power and popularity swings so harshly that what originally started as something well reasoned to address a concern of the time quickly gets lost and then "this is how we do things" happens.

"Many of the magical world's traditions are archaic. Most are in dire need of being updated. However, logic is prevalent in everything humans do, whether muggle or magical. The next time your mind goes to how ridiculous something about the wizarding world is, think about it. Is it truly foolish, or is there some reason behind it that you're just not understanding?"

HP: The Otherworlder

HP: The Otherworlder

Book&Literature · BS6SC

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"What?" the speaker smirked slyly, waiting until Edmund took another sip from his flask. "You don't like 'Mr. Tom, a dildo lover' more?"

HP: The Otherworlder

HP: The Otherworlder

Book&Literature · BS6SC

mrpixeltech
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I get the feeling he knows and is just waiting to give an abject lesson in loyalty and upfront truth.

"See that you do," Voldemort agreed. "There's no telling when Marvolo Slytherin might be in need of you knowing that information. It has been far too long since the neutrals have felt any fear."

HP: The Otherworlder

HP: The Otherworlder

Book&Literature · BS6SC

mrpixeltech
mrpixeltech
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Can't tell if "eu-topia" is a typo or you're being clever -_-

"I always did have a fondness for vampires. But I am not here to speak to you about how I escaped, but why I did so. You know, Albus, when you beat me, I was more than happy to let you have your moment. We fought and you won. You deserved your opportunity to achieve your version of the greater good. Now, fifty years later, and I can't help but pity you. Was this truly all you hoped to achieve? You have weakened our species and neutered their magic. But where is your vaunted peace? Where is your promised Eutopia that you liked to rave about? When you look inside yourself, are you proud of what you became?"

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

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"I do not plan on killing him, no. I am not a monster. If I had my way, Harry Potter would live a long and prosperous life, just far away from here."

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

mrpixeltech
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Ohohoho... you're going the full Demon's Run route. Is Daphne going to give a rendition of the "you've made them so afraid" speech?

"Yes. I was planning to study it, the day you betrayed me. It's not like it did me any good here, did it? And now you have it. I did my duty, I tried to warn you. Whatever happens next, Albus is on your head. Farewell, Albus…"

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

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AN: This was pretty hard to write. As usual, please let me know what you think or if you have any suggestions.

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

mrpixeltech
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C'mon... don't tell me you're going to go through with the Alice/Frank backstory foreshadow.

The Malfoy scion shrugged, "Don't know. Don't care. They might as well be considering just how inseparable they are. No one really tried asking him about it, but no one in the house had the guts to touch her or her sister. Potter is all nice and calm when you leave him alone, but he could be fucking terrifying when you get a rise out of him. No one wants to risk poking the dragon and all that."

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

mrpixeltech
Commented

Author, if you ever do a rewrite... this plot line feels a bit forced. Feels like you were so focused on humanizing Harry after how horrific the gaslighting was that you ignored the practicality of his forgetting the risk of Neville being a Horcrux, regardless of magic crests.

"I know it's not my fault, but I should have seen it. I spent two hours a week with him for fuck's sake. The jump in ability, his unstable temper, they were all signs, and I should have realized what was happening. I should have been objective, but I felt too guilty about what happened last year and willfully closed my eyes to the truth and Warrington almost died for that…"

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

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mrpixeltech
mrpixeltech
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Love everything up to this point but I think taking on multiple antagonist plot lines without the slightest resolution is quickly inducing conflict fatigue in this reader at least.

This entire thing was a trap in the making and Harry felt like a fly caught in a web. The tournament, the spectators, the stakes - it all felt like an elaborate setup. He was being manoeuvred into a corner, and he really didn't like it.

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

mrpixeltech
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Sounds like Neville might be a regressor at this point.

"Not really… I taught myself a lot about Ancient Egyptian Runes, enough to do the project in a couple of days by myself. I just go there to make sure that Bones and Longbottom actually learn how to use Runes. Although, our resident celebrity is strangely good at them."

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

mrpixeltech
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It's really difficult to find HP fanfics that lean towards a poetic imagery for magic rather than "I pictured a light switch hooked up to a sun, and so I created a solus maxima that can burn a bajillion miles". I also really enjoy the fact that the 'dark side' is truly seductive, not to mention magic itself. Great job!

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