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Sequence Potions from Lord of Mysteries, Nice Touch.

I am really not following this chain of conversation that went from "You entered my territory" to "Let's fight so that I can break through my limits against a 15 year old with more brains and hard work than the entire supernatural world". If humans could truly use blade blacksmith such a way then they could have created their own sacred gears by now and devils would have destroyed all the pantheons in the world.

So ... MC can shoot pebbles through tree trunks but had trouble dealing with a few hundred zombies. Yeah, that makes sense.

MC seems like a maso simp, he totally acting like some sort of pet/mascot/guide for the group. Even gave the leadership to Takeshi, Pathetic. Also his fake history rants are annoying, like he has not even gone through any of that stuff but simply inherited some warped memories that are a mix of Mukaza from Noblesse world and HOTD world's fake vampire and werewolf history. The story really lacks proper foundation for the MC.

I think this MC is a stupid brute because despite being powerful he keeps fighting head on even when he does not need to. He could have just lure the dead out of the way to clear the path in advance? The zombies are not really smart and would follow anyone who makes a lot of noise. He could have just created a distraction and escape from the roof but instead he took the whole group to fight the dead head on while having their back against the wall. Clearly very stupid to entirely depend of the plot based rescue when things are already different from the plot.

I don't have any ill intention when I say this but the author seems to be overly descriptive about unimportant things and also uses too much of flowery language which is having a negative effect on the reading experience.

Interesting start, I think I have rarely seen MCs in fanfic obtaining their wishes in such a manner.

Am I the only one who feels like this is a dialogue between two Chinese scholars?

Disgusting! This guy is really spineless, he lets both Stark and SHIELD walk all over him.

The Harry Potter timeline is wrong here, Dumbledore does not become headmaster till 1960s and Marauders are not in Hogwarts till 1970s.

Has anyone noticed that the MC pretty much yields to most demands made by Tony. I really dislike this strange fan boy or father-son dynamic between these two. MC is missing his family but is willing to yield to Tony's childish whims. Does he think of Tony as his kid?

Now I feel the MC is simply being a show off. If valerian steel would make the world feel greedy then a flying ship would just drive them insane. It's like the MC is basically saying that Stark build flying armada would dominate the world.

I think Zelretch was talking about Tokyo Ravens world. I'm almost 80% sure.

I feel that a Naruto fanfic with Chinese dialogues somewhat ruins the story.

MC's words of enticement sounds a bit like cringy propaganda you can find on posters. It kinda reminds me of the the propaganda in the Captain America movie.

The story has been great so far, I hope the author keeps to British terminology and not revert to Chinese one.