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Just a suggestion here author: ease up on the verbs and description. Take this sentence as an example (which has a period in it that probably was meant to be a comma—But even with that, its a run on sentence). Instead of describing every detail, and trying to draw parallels for the reader, try just mentioning her effect on other people. Let the reader’s imagination fill in the blank on the specifics. It’s been well established that she’s pretty 😊
Shangguan Bing Xue's distinctive silver-colored hair that most of the time fell free and unrestrained all the way down onto her lower back. at this moment was tied in a high ponytail, exposing her slender neck like that of a beautiful swan that shimmered under the glow of the moon and the artificial light bulbs.
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
Correction: F110 on full afterburn (max thrust). Thats same engine in F16 Jet. At least thats what wikipedia tells me (131 kN), and I bet that number is only seen in the lab 😏
By increasing gravity x15 times the norm, one could imagine how strong was the impact Bai Zemin's body received when he finally hit the ground after falling from a height of over 200 meters!
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
From my back of the napkin math (986 kg * 147 meters per second = 144.9 kN), it was slightly more than the thrust of an F100 jet engine (130 kN) 😂
By increasing gravity x15 times the norm, one could imagine how strong was the impact Bai Zemin's body received when he finally hit the ground after falling from a height of over 200 meters!
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
You = Author, not you Halloween… Sorry threading/replies suck on this platform
This was something that was carefully studied by an intelligence team in charge of studying the limitations and changes of mana in the means of communication. This team was only composed of 5 people so far, but they were all very smart with brilliant ideas and, in fact, they had already discovered that cell phones had not stopped working completely... It was just that the distance between two cell phones had to be less than 100 kilometers or the call could never connect.
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
I’m nitpicking here (fictional story) but cell phones communicate to cell towers (ground stations). Ignoring that, let’s say these are sat phones, distance between two phones wouldn’t be the issue. Cell A => Sat => Base Station => Cell B, thats the (normal) communication path. But we can even say Cell A => Sat => Cell B if you want. Distance between Cell A and Cell B wouldn’t be the problem. It’s really distance between Cell to Sat. Does Cell (A or B) have a line of sight to Sat is real Q. With todays tech standards at least, a building or tree can disrupt that let alone “mana”. Think Satalite TV, a thubderstorm can disrupt that. Again, nitpicking here (overall good story, clearly, or I wouldn’t be commenting a few hundred chapters in 😂).
This was something that was carefully studied by an intelligence team in charge of studying the limitations and changes of mana in the means of communication. This team was only composed of 5 people so far, but they were all very smart with brilliant ideas and, in fact, they had already discovered that cell phones had not stopped working completely... It was just that the distance between two cell phones had to be less than 100 kilometers or the call could never connect.
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
Generally bullets fly faster than speed of sound. So you’d hear the bang after the blood 😏
Suddenly there was a sound of gunfire from the front and the front window of the vehicle cracked. But the militant driving was more concerned about the hot liquid that had splashed on his right cheek out of nowhere.
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
Logic breaks here. Any weapon you used that you didn’t create yourself wouldn’t get you soul power…. Which is most kills in this novel.
It was probably for the reasons Lilith mentioned earlier that those driving the buses did not receive any experience even though they killed several zombies by crushing them mercilessly.
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
⬆️⬆️⬇️⬇️⬅️➡️⬅️➡️🅱️🅰️START
He typed the one-time code he had received from the Royals, making the Highmaster armor and its wearer immune from the city arrays and the laws of the Kingdom.
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
"They're dead. Dead men aren't able to move," Zhang Xuan replied impassively, as if he was just pointing out a fact.
Library of Heaven's Path
Eastern · Heng Sao Tian Ya
Oh this is going to be good.
"On top of that, several survivors witnessed Great Mage Nuragor fighting alongside the undead during the coup. Tell me, Velan. Did Kallion change overnight, are you so incompetent that you failed to notice you were raising a snake in the grass or were you part of his schemes?"
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
"Love is too strong a word to be abused like that. Only a shallow person that knows nothing about their own feelings can use it so freely with someone they have just met. I've been asked out by a lot of men like you.
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
'Without the magical marvels her husband provides her, Jirni is not even half the fighter she usually is.'
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
I’m laughing tears.
"That was intense." Nalrond didn't know whether to laugh or cry at the Lich's antics.
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
A few moments later, he spoke with a charming smile on his face, "I don't mind it at all."
Dual Cultivation
Eastern · MyLittleBrother
"I cannot believe the Sect Master really managed to cultivate for this long without exhausting himself. What a legend…"
Dual Cultivation
Eastern · MyLittleBrother
'So you have finally shown yourself! I don't care who you are— I will make you regret stealing Wu Jingjing from me!' Lian Heng could feel his heart burning with anger and jealousy just thinking about the years of effort he'd put into courting Wu Jingjing only to have another man steal her from him, even defiling her body by impregnating her.
Dual Cultivation
Eastern · MyLittleBrother
😏
"Don't even mention it. And if you ever feel like cultivating together again, just let me know." He said with a smile.
Dual Cultivation
Eastern · MyLittleBrother
After a moment of pondering, Su Yang nodded. "Okay, then let's do it. If it becomes too painful to bear, let me know."
Dual Cultivation
Eastern · MyLittleBrother
Fair point on the distance. I actually didn’t catch what it was until you pointed it out. Thought our boy was being a long distant sniper. C’est la vie. Looking back he used Type 54 which indeed is a pistol and supports usually 9mm or .38 Super (7.62 phasing out).
Suddenly there was a sound of gunfire from the front and the front window of the vehicle cracked. But the militant driving was more concerned about the hot liquid that had splashed on his right cheek out of nowhere.
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN