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I think you might be going a little over board with him trying to act like a kid and for the gods to waiver easily to his whims.

ugh not Haley she is annoying and you can see it already with how he treats her.

the gravity 20 times is to much I hope you can rewrite that. even the saiyan planet was on 10 times the gravity. I know it's a different universe but what they can achieve with that gravity is monstrous.

thinking the same thing

next update status????

I didn't even know you had a patreon. what is it?

I hope this isn't used to keep Haley on his tour or for their relationship to advanced not a fan of her actually.

I hate that ppl make GOT a Phoenix story its about dragons in this case carrying the blood of dragons in himself. I swear 🤬 smh

iam for one to destroy all sarutobi and shimura clans. he might not care regarding his clan, but those two and theirs should always die. I hate when they try to make him look like a leader with troubles. will always be a master manipulator in my eyes.

please fix this chapter

he has to input his Baby driver skill eventually.

haha, just saw it did say that oops and thanks.

great story. I really like it, but I think you're doing heros like Superman injustice by not letting them win ever. I get the non enhance heroes need some upgrade, but you only seem to be focusing on them. I don't get why you didn't show how Superman chose Earth and its humans over his people, making him the last kryptonion.

nothing really their orders are to guard her and Jon so they will do it regardless of who the next king is.

I am so confused. Isn't he like 2 and a half years old? His master is the sect leader to be. this did not make any sense at all.

didn't like this chapter. it's not like he forced them to play the game. their is a horror genre tag on it, which most noticed. honestly, those who got scared and couldn't fight anymore are not worth it, in my opinion. one thing I hate that makes this cliche is the heroine right off the bat though. just my thoughts on this. I'll still read though thanks for the chapters ahead.

well, hopefully it's during the marriage ceremony or before.

when's the next chapter???

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