Please, stop the « kun » !
Thank you translator. Just One think : can you remove all the « kun » from your translation ?
Author tend to dumb down the supporting characters a lot just to make Daichi seem a little smarter. But let's face it, Genma is a veteran who served alongside the 4th Hokage. He has a wealth of experience that far surpasses anything the MC has ever experienced. As a result, he was more than capable of deducing the possibility of a final trap aimed at the minister's wife well before Daichi.
Was this part really necessary for the story, author ? You have a bad habit of constantly wanting to explain everything, even if it means going back in your story just to show another POV. It's a real shame because what's originally cool just becomes redundant. Like someone rehashing the same story but just from different angles. Implicit writing is important because it maintains a sense of mystery while giving the reader the freedom to imagine certain aspects of the story for themselves.
I’m here. And i’m pretty sure I’m not the only one.
I love you all in the most non homo way, unless you are a female reader which I doubt we have.
Arriving in the Naruto world by filling out a form
Anime & Comics · Zeenon
Worse obviously. What's the point of this cover anyway ?
And Btw, how is the new cover? Better or Worse?
Star Wars Rebels: A Gray Tale
Movies · Abstracto
As long as you don't write them like in this chapter. Only the main character's point of view should be written in the first person singular. Others's POV should be written in the third person singular. Otherwise, the character hierarchy is disrupted, which hurts the overall immersion. I had to skip the entire chapter because it was too unsettling to be forced into the shoes of a secondary character, as if she suddenly became the main character of your story.
{1st chapter in a different character's POV, so tell me how was it, if this was good then I could try and make more such chapters.}
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Anime & Comics · Zeenon
Ren is the only main character here so why are you writing a non-MC's POV using the pronoun "I" ?
The story is titled H x H. Does it mean you will end this fanfic soon ?
As much as I love the direction your story is taking so far, and it's quite well-written, I'm blown away every time you make the same mistake. Writing from the point of view of a secondary character (who isn't your main character) in the first person singular just makes no sense. Every time, I feel like I'm reading the perspective of the same person, whom I'll call Random, but with a different identity. I don't see Toji, I don't see Naobito... I just see Random. Because there's no sense of "personality" in these passages. It's just neutral, almost lazy writing. Honestly, this poison spreading on this website is just bad writing.
I Was Killed by Sukuna
Anime & Comics · Well_being