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nvm forgot they didn't know she isn't mute

didn't they mention before meeting her mate that her ability doesn't actually work through phones so she can actually talk on the phone without influencing them or am I misremembering?

I would say levels are more of a guideline than a hard and set rule in this story. and even then it seems to grow exponentially rather than linearly. So in the lower levels 1 level difference isnt all that much but after level 50 or so the differnce of 1 level could be equal to the difference of all the levels that came before it. So ultimate being ~50 and ultimate being ~80 still could make sense and that would make a being whose level 50 far weaker than someone who's level 51. or atleast something similar to that. I mean it's not my story and it seems to make some amount of sense to me at least

I think the ones used here are the ones Madara and obito used not Nagato. so they got different properties not just Chakra distribution. though the ones Madara and Obito used had the property of destroying everything it touched.

I don't thinks it's about bleach not being quirky enough but about the power system in place and how the arcs are laid out. In naruto not every arc was about increasing narutos power in order to defeat stronger enemies, there were a good number of arcs just dedicated to fleshing out characters even if a lot of them are Filler. while in bleach it's just one bad after the next trying to increase ichigos power so he can take them on. if you throw Yuna in the mix where she is already established as strong, the arcs become somewhat trivial as you know that yuna can take care of everything. Also in naruto their is a completely different power system with Chakra and Chakra nature's which somewhat hindered Yuna growth making it much more interesting than her just powering up early in the story and blitzing all her enemies while bleach is very much similar to cultivating and she got really strong really fast, not allowing her to "grow" in a more natural rate like ichigo did in bleach. In naruto she scaled alongside naruto, just slightly ahead while in bleach she just ignored ichigo the mc and went on to become exponentially more powerful than he was in a short amount of time. So yeah, while this is still a very interesting story and I really like how you wrote it, it is much different to your first one and I can see why it would be harder to write.

it was from earlier in the book, I'm pretty sure it had something to do with him being to busy leading the mutants and not taking any time to build a real connection with her so she rebeled by joining the military and training with the widows.

was it not "Drink, Nozarashi"? or was the translations weird

I'm pretty sure excelia earned scales with difficulty. like if you had 1 really difficult encounter you could make more excelia than if you just slaughtered your way through easy mobs. So Sayuris slaughter of all the ants wouldn't have given much excelia in the first place because it was already to easy. Danmachi is like an mmo game in this aspect that if your too high level you recieved reduced exp for easier mobs but if your fighting above your level you receive increased exp.

yep but maybe a little less dead than 2x gravity, also they would only need to enhance humans a little bit more instead to doubling or more their capabilities with a super soldier serum

the only way to increase Chakra at least in nauruto was to increase either spiritual energy by meditating or physical energy by physically training, because Chakra is made by blending the 2 if you where to increase both you would increase the amount of Chakra you had access to. The method they author is using seems more like the cultivation method where by increasing the size of you meridians you can get more qi flowing through them which is not really the case for the narutoverse.

that in itself was plot armor, it's not like sasuke could have beat orochimaru on a 1v1 so the fact that he didn't get take over is plot armor. Also the only quality that makes sasuke desirable for orochimaru is that he has the sharingan also plot armor. the fact that he instantly get EMS when he starts to go blind from spamming his MS abilities is plot armor, the fact that obito takes him in after sasuke "kills itachi" is plot armor, he has no reason to take sasuke in other than the fact that he's a uchiha and could possibly be useful. If we are talking about preparedness, naruto developed his own jutsu under the guidance of kakashi and the wood user dude, got advise from asuma on wind manipulation, learned how to communicate and control his biju Chakra from B and learned the rasengan from perry sage, learned sage mode from the toads. arguably Naruto was more prepared for the war than Sasuke was. Yes some of it was plot armor like him being the son of the 4th and an uzumaki but arguably the same is said for sasuke being the son of the head of the uchiha clan the difference in sanin that trained them is that jiraya was narutos god-father and had a legitimate want to make naruto strong teaching him the jutsu his father developed while orochimaru wanted sasukes body and could have taken it at any point in time and just trained it himself but for some reason decided not to

can't really remember the teams properly but didn't Stan say he replaced a dwarf who got traumatized by a spider monster? so is this the right team? or did Stan somehow someway lie about that? or are they being lied to right now?

would a cave not be a terrible idea when running from something? like it has 1 visible entrance/exit so your cornering yourself with no way out?

the whole age thingy is throwing me off, cuz like fugaku is ~5 years older than hiashi and they are both older than minato by atleast 6 years and minato is 10 years older than kakashi who should have been born by now. because kakashi was born before the start of the second great ninja war. there is only really a 3 year gap between the second and 3rd great ninja war (atleast in cannon). and the second great ninja war lasted all of about 1 year.

considering in the second great ninja war tsunade (according to cannon) was ~30 and kakashi and tsunade have a roughly 27 year age gap kakashi's generation should be popping up around now

I knew he had a brother just not if he was older or younger, considering its around the time when kakashi's generation is suppose to be popping up I assumed it was Asuma and he had a younger brother

isn't it suppose to be Asuma? like the jonin who smokes, leader to team 10? Shikimaru Ino and Chojis sensei?

so did thyme just make a body with nerves in the time between lily explaining about nerves and now or did he just neglect to tell mint about nerves? but if he neglected to tell mint about nerves then how does she know he can make a body with nerves? it can't be language or word issue because the demon translation would auto correct for it.

it only affects what it "strikes" not on contact, so if you touch, move, hit his blade without being struck in return it wouldn't double the weight and what yuna did was divert his blade without it hitting her so it wouldn't double the weight of her hand

Mostly because it seems like you're going into a lot of detail on stuff and it seems like you actually put in some effort to make things "correct" and not just good enough. If the story was written in a manner that didn't convey it was for those who actually liked to get into the small details of things I might not have bothered but you wrote the story in a way that made it seem like you cared so I decided to care a little as well.