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(A.N. Chocolate is the only universal ice cream I find. Obviously, some people don't like it but it's probably the most liked in total.)

Eye System in RWBY

Eye System in RWBY

Anime & Comics · BillNyeThePGGuy

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Nah, it'll work. It would be even more effective since he would be too into it!

'If someone use Legilimency on me, I just have to think of Boku no Pico.' Joked Magnus, but he still kept this tactic as a viable counterattack.

HP: Eagle Soars

HP: Eagle Soars

Book&Literature · SHEOGORATH

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For me it's not really the action but the reasoning. I had no real expectations of an 11 year old saving Elia, but the MCs thoughts were about rewarding the Mountain... for whatever reason. Not only it doesn't make sense, it makes the MC seem like a coward.

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Starting this review, I have to say that the premise of the story is very interesting and fairly original so kudos to you! Overall Rating 3⭐:Good read. You may want to wait until there are more chapters. Rating: World background 3⭐: What you expect is what you get. The world the MC transmigrates to is a hentai-dating-sim whith heavy emphasis on Martial Arts, where if you if you are not perfect to a girl...well NTR is in the title. Character design3⭐: Not much to be said really, most characters in genuine dating sims come off as stale and one-dimensional so expectations are kinda low. As for the MC...The concept is not necessarily bad. Reading about a weak-willed individual finding his way and tackling his problems in such an absurd scenario could be enthralling, but due to how the story is written in first person the MC comes across like a dumb crybaby, especially in the latest "Do you have a dream?" arc. Seriously it's like he can't think for himself at all. Story development 4⭐: The story is captivating with mysteries,twists and heavy emotions thrown into the mix. It may be a bit of a mess at the beginning with moral and logical inconsistencies but I find it mirrors the MC's **yche so it's okay. What is not okay though is the lack of interaction between the MC and the netorare girl. Chapter 47 is my favourite so far mainly due to how the phonecall plays out, so you can understand how lackluster I find the interactions with the previous girl. Writing 4 ⭐: The story can be read properly despite being written here, full marks....that is what I would have said, but I have to say that the story would be better with permanent 3rd person pov. Updating stability 1⭐: Not much to say really. Look at the chapter content dates and judge yourself.

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