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The story background is very detailed and interesting. To come up with such a plot is commendable on its own and should be respected. There are a few things that I personally find that make this book hard to read such as the fact that because of the time skip and information dump that happened in the beginning the chapters so fat fell choppy. ( basically the story doesn’t really flow right and you jumping from one thing to the next too quickly) besides that this story so far is very detailed and has a very interesting take on the J. K. Rowling’s world combining many different little details that most fanfic writers often overlooked Recommendations to the author 1. To be honest I don’t think you should have started this book at the TriWiz tournament because it has the capacity to be a full length version and it will help readers understand what you have built into the Harry Potter world much better than a few paragraphs could ever hope to do. 2. Going by the poll you had readers do, write down a few notes on important events that have/will happen in your character’s journey along with plot points in the Hogwoart’s timeline that he will inevitably be involved in. 3. Never mind the hate comments. This is YOUR fanfic written by YOUR hand if some idiot has a problem with that tell them to write their own story 4. Constantly updating is always better than nothing. Even if you don’t have anything written tell your readers that the chapters are coming out soon. You could also write ahead of where we (readers) are in order to not have to worry about finishing a chapter so that we (readers) can get to it.