nah with PTV there he would lose his teleporter immediately and then shit would really start hitting the fan.
ch 0 6 Time Passes
Anime & Comics · DanteMustDie
I quite like this story. One big minus though is the many authors notes in the middle of chapters, they completely breaks any flow you have while reading. please move these to the end of the chapter and just place a footnote.
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Others · Seud
yep it seems he regressed in every stat
A general rule of thumb when doing different pov is to never do the same timespan. As all rules in writing it is ok to bend this rule, but then there should be something else to not make it feel like you're reading the same thing twice. For example in this chapter you could have one pov during the vision and then another after, that would still show their different thoughts.
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Fantasy · Roh594
Good idea and nice nice start. The grammar, though, is terrible and I just can't read it. I takes courage to try and post though and I commend you for that. Try finding someone to help with your grammar.
Talent System In Naruto
Anime & Comics · ravenwings