iAmJaMz

iAmJaMz

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New Gamer's Multiverse

Book&Literature · BingeFics

iAmJaMz

3yr

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It's actually better to wear some clothes. if you're exposed to the sun, you'll burn your skin, getting blisters. Also, your sweat is meant to keep you cool, without anything to keep it contained, you're just gonna burn up.

In one instant, I took down most of the clothes that I wore, thanking the whatever god that existed for blessing me with enough foresight to dress in the way I did. Only once just my shorts and light t-shirt remained on top of my body I could feel that my sweating started to slowly subside.

While Others Cultivate, I Use My Multiverse System

Eastern · MotivatedSloth

iAmJaMz

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Fulfilling my Lustful Fantasies

Fantasy · Fnatic_Fan

iAmJaMz

3yr

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Fulfilling my Lustful Fantasies

Fantasy · Fnatic_Fan

iAmJaMz

3yr

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Edit "tear" to "tier".

"Would you like to learn about alchemy? It can speed up your cultivation if you manage to refine a few pills. Not to mention that you will learn to control a flame. It will be pretty useful to use flames since you have awakened a phoenix bloodline. You should be able to learn control much faster so three days should be enough to get you started." He said then quickly realising he only had high tear herbs. They weren't suitable for a novice to refine.

The Legendary F Rank

Fantasy · Zero_Things

iAmJaMz

3yr

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I couldn't deal with the edgy dialogue. Important factors of the story were forced, like extremely forced. Some grammar issues but not the worse. My deciding factor to drop the book was the was the edgy and cringe dialogue. I wasn't didn't see it being developed into something more interesting. BUT if you don't mind the dialogue and some forced development, then you'll be fine. Wish you well author, and hope you improve.