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Apa yang akan terjadi pada Yon Yuda, lelaki tua yang secara tak terduga meminum Ainul Hayat atau air kehidupan yang membuat orang yang meminumnya muda dan abadi? Banyak refenrensi dari cerita2 islam dan banyak ajaran islam, jadi kalau tidak suka jangan dibaca, Anda sudah diperingatkan!
What will happen to Yon Yuda, the old man who unexpectedly drinks Ainul Hayat or the water of life that makes the person who drinks it young and eternal? There are many references to Islamic stories and many Islamic teachings, so if you don't like them, don't read them, you have been warned!
Yon Yuda dan Ceritanya
Supreme Harem System
Asmodai216: Summary: 3 stars overall. The story has a cool premise, a solid writing style, and a well thought out power system. The only problem is that the Main Character is pretty much railroaded, and poorly at that, into the canon MCU without making any real changes. This, predictably, makes for fairly unsatisfying reading, at least in my case. If you dislike an author that blatantly makes the MC act out of character just to push events towards canon outcomes, this isn't for you.
Writing Quality: 4 stars, it isn't a masterpiece of literature, but the story is pretty damn well written. There aren't any of the blatant grammar issues that run rampant through most of the stories on the site.
Stability of Updates: 4 stars, it isn't quite daily, but it is frequent. Honestly, as long as I get around 5000 or so words a week, I'll call that 5 stars.
Story Development: 1 star, this is where the author starts to tank. It's basically a rehash of all the marvel movies in chronological order, the only difference is, the scenes aren't as well written, and there's a random OC that has zero impact on the plot. Literally nothing changes, at least for the first 20 chapters.
Character Design: 1 star, I might be a little critical here, but the MC just plain sucks. He had a cool premise, but he fell into the same trap that those MCs that are described as "Genius with an IQ of 300" fall into. He didn't match his background with his actions. That is to say, when you describe someone as a Demon Lord who lived for 2,000 years ceaselessly slaughtering humanity, you expect there to be some character traits.
The MC fails to react in anyway that his background would indicate he should. Just like those garbage "genius" MCs end up being complete idiots because the authors themselves are too stupid to write an intelligent character. The MC, Finn, is an absolute failure of a Demon Lord. He claims to want to protect his new life and live it quietly, but immediately throws it away to save the life of some worthless human girl. Said human girl then blackmails him into being her assistant, and Finn just sort of shrugs and goes along with it.
The worst part about all this is that he's completely apathetic to the plight of normal humans, when they get attacked by Hammer Drones for example, he would be perfectly happy to let them all blow up, and doesn't interfere until the girl that's BLACKMAILING him decides to run into the fray under the assumption that our MC will protect her, which he does.
The MC ends up being portrayed as a typical beta-male Japanese light novel protagonist. Now I get that in Japanese culture, things are different. Being assertive, or god forbid rude, is not exactly acceptable there, and it helps explain why some Japanese protagonists are so damn pathetic. That isn't the case here, our protagonist was an American who took advantage of his mother's kindness, before being enslaved and then tortured for years, before spending centuries going on a killing spree. Our protagonist was portrayed as a selfish, bitter man who took out his hatred for the world on literally everyone. Despite that portrayal, the MC somehow reverts to that classic, 14 year old Japanese Isekai protagonist, in spite of being a 2,000 year old genocidal maniac. It doesn't make any damn sense, and the "explanation" given for his behavior is pitiful.
World Background: 5 stars, the power system the MC is set up with is actually well put together, there are no real flaws from what I've observed. The MCU was portrayed pretty damn accurately as well, I couldn't find a single blaring issue with any canon facts, or anything else of that nature.I'm just an 'Ordinary' Human (Marvel fanfic)
MyriadLust: Hello Nyan!
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Giving myself a 5 star review! Not that I believe that my work is a 5/5, just wanted to promote my own work! While I am fluent at English, it is still not my mothertongue, so if you do find any mistakes in my work, do comment and let me know!
Please review as honestly as you can! I mean it’s not like I care about your opinion or anything, B-b-baka!
Cheers Nya~!When an Immortal Emperor enters a Cultivation Chat Group
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Morvian: Debris?? lu bisa ganti pake shard bro!~
Longinus's shard?Dantalion Duke of Devil (DxD fanfic). (Naruto Arc). · C20
Highdaoist: Maybe the telkinisis could evolve into gravity as well so sin can use gravity training and increase gravity on opponents/decrease it on him to make himself fasterThe Original Sin: Despair · C12
GaRage: In the future, I decide to made Rai's harem: Raskreia, Seira, and Aris. After all, Raizel didn't had any romantic exp, so honestly giving him harem out of nowhere is a bit weird.
As for other females such as fubuki or tatsumaki, they can be given to Frankenstein, if he's interested though...Noblesse in One Punch Man · C10
Morvian: sorry, but I don't like this chapter atmosphere!~
it's make my brow slanted from the start until the end!~The Divine Anime System · C15
BoneChillingFlame: Bro if he somewhat like archer he gonna be a little moody but thats his pride. Striving to be the ultimate hero like saber or somewher close. From what I read so far he fine he dimension hopping so I rather his personality mindset change a little with training and techings from archer ,the person who tried to become a hero when he was a kid. Then mysteriously in the middle. What im trying to say is it fine he like this you could say he acting like child some time because the body going though puberty.The Divine Anime System · C15
Plato: The way you wrote it made it seem like less of an internal conflict for Rei and more of a hissy fit over his lack of control. He should have realized how he had been acting and should have been shocked, but his immediate tantrum felt like you, the author, had the realization rather than the actual character, Rei, having the realization. I enjoy your story and I hope you'll be able to make it even better.The Divine Anime System · C15
Plato: Super cringey. This chapter didn't feel right at all. This felt like you forcefully trying to patch up your story rather than a progression in the plot line.The Divine Anime System · C15
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LelouchViBrittania: The ****!!!! He NTRed himself. XDReincarnation in Against The Gods · C56
swaran: Do one chapter of future him taking her virginityReincarnation in Against The Gods · C56
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DemonicFairy: Wtf im dissappointed!!! Wtf is this talk about nen being the superior to any form of energy and now some puny needle can stop him? Even Creation God items cant do **** to him and now item refined by true god can affect him? Creation God is above True God btw, so wtf is this ****? His nen cant stop some trashy needle wtf???????Hunter x Hunter System in Against The Gods · C14
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netero1337: heavenly treasureHunter x Hunter System in Against The Gods · C12
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