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Is this some chinese HP novel that you're autotranslating or something? Like come on, how can you even misspell Hogwarts as Hogue? My advise is to use a spell checker, like word spell check or grammarly and edit all the most basic mistakes, then make sure the story specific mistakes like Hogue don't appear.
The new academic year at Hogue has begun… from the scandal. No, the welcome feast was quite normal. There was some commotion and confusion at the vulture table, but this is their standard behavior, so they attracted no more attention than usual.
The new Ferret(Harry Potter)
Book&Literature · FlaBer
Love this story! Your writing style is captivating. In my opinion i'd think a writing style of 75/25 would be perfect, 75% of the chapters or so from Magnus PoV, 25% from others PoV. If you could manage a ratio thereabout without breaking immersion I'm sure you'd be able to create a world where it feels like there are other real human beings, except magnus. Their interaction from their PoV with him and others around him is the key. Looking forward to more!
ch 17 Chapter 17: Interlude Year 2.
HP: Eagle Soars
Book&Literature · SHEOGORATH
Really good so far, only thing lacking so far is some depth to the characters, but I'll guess we may get that in the upcoming chapters, and some initial world building, especially in the dradfort. But it's early days. Everything else was great so far!
Leech Lord (ASOIAF/SI)
Book&Literature · Daoist5hKyB1