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Great pacing! would have loved battle details...

okay it's a bit of a rant so sorry, a fan of the work btw.. just suggestions and personal thoughts... story concept and flow wise is great, a bit verbose in areas while in some just blasting through, I suggest spacing out your details so that it has a better rhythm, cause honestly, it feels like Im reading in the pacing of sandstorm by darude... conceptually it is great but I feel like the character is taking way too much in at one time on the fly... not much thought process to develop character understanding... I would have loved some insights about current events of why character wants to introduce certain products and techs, not just because he can, since it makes a void in the characters drive to do things... anyway long rant couldn't stop reading till this chap so yeah... can't wait for the next chap... also - military cant [or] camp? saw it a couple of times In about 2 more instances...

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