i read coomer high school , that was funny
ch 36 Perfect Guy
Urban · lynerparel
is the author greek?
ch 0 3 Casanova enters the scene
Urban · SamsaraWithWords
Part 2 of notes for author; Why the cussing? Just use other sentences , using f.u.c.k. with dots just disrupts the flow of the story . Also did you really make a supposedly pristine head of a family with other guests at a party shout f.u.c.k. no?This doesn't make sense
ch 117 Plan Failed...
Fantasy · Drip
Another couple of critiques since I read this far; A question is a question . Stop using an exclamation mark instead . Also you use way too many exclamation marks where a simple full stop would suffice.And one last thing , the dialog needs work . Its just unnatural . Nobody talks like some sentences in here . I suggest to envision like you are speaking to someone rather making grammaticaly correct sentenses.
ch 117 Plan Failed...
Fantasy · Drip
**** that is awesome . To rip space and go anywhere you like
ch 51 Chapter 51 Space Tear
Eastern · ZeusTheOlympian
That painted quite a picture cause serviette in my language means sanitary pad. That was hilarious
"Is it settled now?" Yi Yeyu wiped her mouth with a serviette.
Eastern · Nuclear Warhead Cooked in Wine
long and hard like my pp
"However, the journey will be long and hard. There are guards waiting for me on the first stage from whom I have to escape. Then, I would have to travel alone for many months and all of this will be useless if I don't pass their entrance test."
Birth of the Demonic Sword
Eastern · Eveofchaos