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I would have gone for Conjuration, Destruction and Alteration. Enchanting and Alchemy are more like side professions. It would also have made your MC more unique. Instead of going for the magic swordman that every single SI goes for.

Really happy that this came back. One of my favorite realistic pokemon fics that doesn't go into grimdark territory.

Some fanfic about The Lord of the Mysteries.

Are you writing these last few chapters with Chatgtp or other AI programs? Because this whole "For the Horde!" and "For the Alliance! shouting matches really makes everyone look like NPCs. It's specially stupid when no one even played the game to have any kind of connection to the factions. All the rivalry came after the game came out, not before it.

The hialarious part where Seto literally used himself as a hostage xD

Nothing should happen because Yugi never used Exodia against Seto so Weevil shouldn't be scared of him using it.

What's the point of the whole glitch thing? It just makes everything frustrating. Just give the MC a rare ticket and be done with it.

This chapter was literally a fix fic. There was nothing that made special use of the firekeeper. You just put her there, fixed the whole compulsion problems, prevented the attack, healed everyone, etc with fire that heals. But there was nothing special that really showcases how special the Firekeeper is. Right now she might as well be the DC Human Torch that heals. You need to play to her strenghts and special characteristics. Not just default to your typical dude in spandex that hits and heals things.

Not really like the direction that this is taking. I feel like if you're going to use a nun MC, and the Firekeeper at that, that she should be more like a cultist. Staying behind the lines and creating a religious movement to combat evil and all that. Not joining the Avenger and throwing fireballs like you run of the mill superhero MC.

I don't remember. Was there something that the Hall of Souls needed to do with urgency where the souls were a must? Because they're doing A LOT of noise for losing the souls of 3-4 minor halls that they could replenish with enough time and patience instead of this rushed action.

Why is the Bodhisattva Heart part of the title? It doesn't have anything to do with the chapter. Just the elder mentioning it but nothing more.

Wow is the MC mastering the dao of the Young Master? Thinking of rejecting Dou Saint Bone Marrow and other Dou Saint resources because the dude was ugly.

"two mega evolved pokemon when most struggle to get one", it's funny that the MC is the one saying that with the number of Mega Stones that he had. If he didn't gift them like they were Super Potions he would be incredible OP.

I'm asking because in the Author Notes you speficy that you wrote a little about what would have happened if Pete wasn't in the picture but then in the chapter itself Peter is there and you even make him interact with Ryan. As if this chapter was another PoV following Pete's story instead of a "What If Pete was never there".

So this is like a non-canon side story? A "what if" if the MC wasn't there. Basically the original fanfiction used as an excuse for the story of Pete. Just want to be sure that this has nothing to do with the original plot.

The Leviathan. Random chance or Eywa saying that the uranium under the water is a big no no?

Their aim is so incredible that they can even shot any projectile (except bullets) shot their way. That means grenades, rockets, balls of lava, etc.