Webnovel Author: radashta - Novel Collection

I had an army business that couldn't be avoided. The release schedule will be as written in a week at most. Feel pained myself. The main character will have entanglements throughout the story, but there will only be 2 or at most 3 no more.

I have been conceptualizing this story for quite a while now, and I finally decided it was time to share it with everyone. I will certainly bring this story to the end. the only thing that can be a problem for me is my English because it’s my third language, but over time I will improve it and make everything work as it should. This story will hook many people. The world-building, characters, plot, etc. will be great, but most importantly the main character that’s who I am counting on, and he won't disappoint. Upload schedule // minimum 10-14 // every week\\ daily uploads guaranteed.

I don't know, man I feel conflicted too many romances out there. People love writing romances. I will give writing quality 5 never care about that, a story that's what's important, quality can be updated story won't be saved if its trash. stability of updates 5, Story development is slow, seems slow, but gives a feeling that everything's going on its own course. it seems nothing majors happening but something always goes down. like Zubair's and Ayan's conflict spiced things up and gave depth to the characters, but it's not enough, the story needs a unique trait that will make it different from other contemporary romances. Development 4. character design I like almost everyone, except the main character she seven parts annoying, four parts still child, mostly in denial, doesn't seem to know herself well at her goddamn age, five parts kind, caring, overall conflicted about her still don't like her. Ayan is he a man or beta? don't know yet. But his great and has depth to him. Why does he like Naira don't know yet truly. Character design 3. world background, not that important giving 5. opinion is subjective I can change it for worse or for good.

I gave the writing quality five, completely deserves it. Stability four because we don't see that many chapters. Story development four-bit slow for me. Character design for every character is great not a single complaint there, five. World background not much to see for now three for now.

understood the update system is quite good here correction can be made quite fast

I got how you saw things improvements can be made thanks. In the second chapter, I explained his ability this way: every time dominus wanted something to become real it would become real. he could choose whatever reality he wanted, for example: if dominus was twelve years old he could see endless possibilities until the age of twenty-two, experience trillions of variations and choose the one which he wanted to follow, he could choose to stop at any timeframe at any moment and everything would go as he desired, there would be no surprises, sudden interferences or anything at all!! Nothing could step in his way. Like this dominus reached the age of twenty-five, so if there was a meteor that was going to fall on earth ten years later, dominus would have time to prepare ten years earlier. Yes, doctor stranges ability is kinda similar just with limitations and Dormammu got aware that he was looped and even in that scene many things can be found flawed, but as long as it's fun we enjoy it. we close our eyes about many things. Also, does the lack of capitalization bother people that much or you guys just notice, should I absolutely fix it or it's not that bothersome?

Thanks for the review! I will explain certain things because you clearly didn’t understand the premise of the story maybe it’s my beginner skill in writing at fault. It's not a revenge based story and the main character doesn’t even care about revenge that much, it’s the creature on his side that existed for revenge and tried to force the main character to tread the path of revenge, but that attempt backfired on the creature. The main character was the manifestation of the purest evil from birth, so he receives the ability to see the future, not alter time. Since he can see the future he can shape it as he wants and that's why he always wreaks havoc, but all that is irrelevant because he does that to curb his evil nature that wants to destroy, in reality, nothing of that sort is happening, it’s the ability that lets him go on a carnage without consequences, but instead of carnage reality that takes shape is different. The flashback was shown because the mother of the main character thinks that his son is omnipotent and omniscient!! from her son's actions she deduced that things were so bad and uncontrollable for her son that he needed to take drastic measures that’s why she (herself) assumed that dominus had no idea about there past and his origin, so she decides to cut all loose ends and tells the creature to share it. And about those treasures, he expressed the desire to possess them not find them. I don’t know about what characters you are referring to because in the first chapter they all died and the others are his family members and I think that’s easy to understand the same surname, a pregnant woman and so on. I agree about grammar, have a hard time with punctuation, messy sentences are easier to resolve for me though than punctuations, my writing is improving so along with it everything else will improve eventually. I don’t think you read chapter 8 and onwards, but it’s ok, but I just don’t understand how you concluded it’s a revenge story.