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this review has a spoiler and the work has a harem Writing Quality: ok, trasnlate translated everything cute so you shouldn't have any big problems Stability of Updates: I don't know, I didn't follow the launch Story Development: descently, at the least of the chapters I read, I found the nerf in the protagonist very small I think I should have been born as a baby and have developed from there with him spending a lot of time creating / adapting the cultivation techniques with the proper ones limitations learning how to do things like kobold or how he was defeated by the tribulation having lost everything he cultivated (including techniques) or at least following another path to immortality since what he tried didn’t work, it also bothers me the ease, convenience and lack of development in alchemy, mainly because of the lack of time which would be solved with the bow "drinks" with him exploring the forest, being abused beautiful father and son (for him to nurture us hate / disgust for them) in fact hunting herbs developing a "taste" for reptilian beauty to justify romance, etc. The point of works reincarnated / transported and about how the protagonist works, reacts and develops in another world with the knowledge he already had, especially when his race is changed, but what is the difference between him being human or kobald? in fact not even his appearance makes any difference since he randomly goes on a "" war "" and meets an elf who falls in love with him being that he is a biped and super developed gecko (bro ... i'm not stupid, that he is just an idiot) and he is so strong that he only enters the fort and kills everyone and that's it. Character Design: the protagonist is already complete and has nothing to cause change or growth, what kind of fucks, the story is about the protagonist she already starts with him ready, complete in the first arc already shows that he will not have difficulty with anything / almost nothing and if you do it will not be his fault, it will probably be the fault of some of the women he has in his harem or that he will add to the harem will never improve him in himself, his skills and cultivation have no limitations ("there are more forward "or" I will put the difficulties / limitations further ahead ", stories are like building, you have to create good bases for a development without them things don't make sense or seem forced), the second characters have no role beyond give information and ***, which is only reinforced with them being all women and in love with him, if it were only the race being sexually open would be fine. plus the addition of the elf falling in love with a laratixa just proves this point World Background: it seems to be a normal fantasy world with a cultivator inserted there, but from what you can see from the first chapters, the world of the protagonist is not superior (reinforced by the ridiculous superiority that he achieves without any effort). in a short time with cultivation and the ease with which he does things that others cannot do, such as adventurers being killed / captured, this being their job with them having information about what they will find having superior weaponry (since the goblins does not keep weapons and has no armor) and the protagonist only goes and kills not only without problems but in an absolute way without any chance of retaliation even against the strongest of them, this shows that the adventurers have an insanely inferior base to the protagonist, so the world must not have anything too much to overcome or match the protagonist. to be fair, it seems like a story about common reincarnation without much thought, with the protagonist ready to go wild in the world decimating his enemies and making a harem. I really just wanted to ask the author to put the harem tag and do a quick review ... but it became that, personally I don't even come close to the harem tag, since it is very difficult to make a story and fit harem / *** in history without destroying the work.
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Character Design: within the context of the history of the heavens trying to soften the protagonist they are ok, outside of that context they are very simple and one-dimensional, they are good or bad or dumb. World Background: if you take into account heaven as a background, it is bad, since heavens change too much and have a lot of influence in history, but I consider heaven as they persist too strong and too influential, so the world is interesting and credible. I hope that the influence of the heavens in the world will diminish in the intermediate and high worlds because of the influence of the opponents and more powerful beings, (from here the opinion of the person with experience of the reader) I also feel that a lower launch rate with a greater amount of text it would help in parts where the author’s influence is obvious, not as a chapter with twice as many words, but I think that 5 chaps per week with 1.5 of the amount of text in the current chapters would give you much more time to think, organize and put on "paper" what you want to pass on to readers, based on my reading works with more space between releases are usually better because of the review. this whole review and my whole opinion and it only serves as another point of view since reading and writing are different things and I'm sure that parts that look good when writing are loose points when reading (I remember today about a text I wrote that the protagonist's mother died and immediately in the next paragraph said that she called him)
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my first impression of the story and that it lacks experience and care in its development, but that the author has a lot of reading baggage (I recommend reading some Korean novels, they have many good works on this escalation from the lower world to the upper), he it avoids errors that I am tired of reading. it is worth following at least until his rise to the intermediary world and see if the errors that bothers me in the work will change.Writing Quality: ok, very decent you are well located and you know what is happening, just stop repeating information that we already know (he has experience you don't need to repeat it so many times he has a stronger body we already understand that too)Stability of Updates: I don’t know, I started reading yesterday (and I’m finished (chap 96)) But I think 2 a day and very good stories need more thought which is one of the problems of this workStory Development: it has its problems, like out of hours or very sudden team skips but its ok, the problem comes in the gain and development of the intention to kill that could be more worked and more challenging because it just comes out of nowhere, it fights and it improvement he suffers and it improves happens very fast without a real challenge for something that should only grow with a life or death challenge, the fights with demonic beasts in the beginning of the story only occurred because he is absolutely sure that he will not die not only because he has experience (at least it seemed like this for me) the animals are treated as if they were stupid / arrogant (or as you call them "inexperienced") which is not a characteristic of animals but of humans (cats have fought once in their lives try to get close to a cat that you don't know or dog, there are those that will accept the approach but in the majority they will have some reaction or alert or withdrawal they will not just ignore you).
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