Thionaak - Profile

Hey, I just started the story and I am about chapter 10. Here are some cons, that I want to bring your attention to, even tho you might know them: 1. Grammar and mixing different tenses incorrectly - I saw that you already know about the tenses, the grammar could be fixed quite a lot, by using Grammarly, it has free version, but I strongly recommend to give the few extra bucks for premium if you want to be a writer professionally, as it will help you tremendously at the beginning. 2. Overusing names and honorifics - I understand that Koreans have a strict way of communicating in society with eachother, however sometimes if done incorrectly it can overwhelm the reader. For example, instead of using the English transcription of the Korean word (Imo, Emomma, Hyung, etc) you could use the English word (Aunt/y; Mother, Big brother, or even drop it in some cases). About the names, you don't have to use the same name for a character 7 times in a paragraph. Contextually we can understand it, and still if you have to use a word to clarify who's talking about what you could use a different word or just a shorter version of the name. 3. Plot holes - I don't know if you have explained it in later chapters, but as of chapter 9 there are couple of questions that are unexplained - what we're his powers in the Magical world, how does the Soul affect him, does he have any powers, etc. Now, from what I understand - you have a better quality work from the 50th + chapter, however if you would like an engagement from the readers and new readers you will have to go and fix your earlier chapters. Let's be real - there are better translated works out here on this website, so how would you retain the new readers if you give an inferior quality of work. Also, I see that you couple of times said that you're a beginner author - no, this is your second work and you've been working on it for over an year, and I believe that you've become much better during this time, so no - you're not a beginner, don't use that as an excuse. I want to finish out with the following, I wish you lots of success in your path, I'm sure that you'll make it, as long as you keep your Ego in check and continue working hard in developing yourself and your skills. Good luck and take care. 🌃✨