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It seems like an interesting story. It is just that the sentence structure is so awkward that I keep getting pulled out of the story. I would suggest getting someone with a good proficiency with English grammar to edit your your chapters. As this is for the first chapters, it might improve later. In that case, I would suggest doing an editing run yourself to fix these issues. I would return and try again if that is done. Good luck.

This story has sevral good points, such as good grammar and sensible choices made by the MC. One thing I would note is the fixation on only German designs. Given the goal of an colonial empire, it does not make sense to use German designs from the first world war for ships, as they were generally meant to operate close to European shores, i.e. the North Sea. They were not designed to support a far-flung colonial empire. I would have suggested using other nations designs, as they may be more suited to the situation at hand. Will the German designs be effective? Yes, given the advancednatureof the designs, but MC should know of better designs. Hopefully the weakness of the German designs will be rectified in the development of the new designs. This will hopefully be addressed in the future chapters.

This is an interesting story. It suffers a lot due to bad grammar, lack of editing and some sentences that does not make sense. I would strongly suggest getting a competent editor to improve on the writing. I've read until chapter 40 and will not be continuing due to the lack of writing quality. It distracts me too much from the story. It is otherwise a pretty stereotypical genius MC and story so far, though with more than 1500 chapters at this point it would be difficult to make a good evaluation of the story and characters based on the first 40 chapters. If you are comfortable reading sentences that sometimes make no sense and ignoring bad grammar you might enjoy the story, if not I would suggest looking for something else to read until these issues have been fixed.