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I think the sudden change is interesting and enjoyable, you should keep at it.

Fair enough, It might have been a snap reaction as the situation for me just felt distasteful. I am sure that Anne is probably a darker character than she was portrayed as (essentially being the slave overseer) I will probably shelve this for now until I am more in the mood where I don't mind psychopathic leads. (my first impression of the characters - granted their backgrounds justify it) Keep up the good work.

Yeah, not going to lie. This and the last few chapters seemed extremely pointless. The plan was more than enough at causing a distraction the separated them from the group, 2 1st realm servants hardly seem like a reason to commit a manhunt, the slaughter of clan members on the other hand is definitely a reason. For a MC that seems to be about calmly planning, that seems like a poor decision.

Though again the above is merely me expressing my thoughts. I know Nora has been earmarked for Logan's harem since before she said she liked him. She practically waved to the readers and said "Hello I am a plot device to make Logan stronger." (with their whole complimentary elementals) That had temporarily slipped my mind. I guess I just really don't like Logan as a character and feel all the time spent on developing Nora as a character is a waste just to add something to him. /shrug I understand the effort to develop Claire as she is his mother, Nora's characterization just feels like a waste to be relegated to a side character's harem, though I know a lot of that is just this author's style with all the previous ones, as a form of minor detail to flesh out the story.

I don't mind, I'm not saying that the author should listen to my opinion or anything, this is my first post since I have been binging the story and there are several times when Davis's character is overly frustrating because his actions or thought process breaks my suspension of disbelief. In this case, he (and Claire) literally just found out that they were misguided in pursuing her revenge, to me, the next logical step would be that maybe our targets are wrong and we should investigate to make sure we don't wrong another incident as obviously, Nora's family is not so amazing that they can't be framed. So yeah, from the previous two thoughts, obviously just a struggle with the suspension of disbelief for myself. Also for me, it is one thing for a character to be ruthless to enemies, but people struggle at compartmentalizing their behaviors so if they are completely indifferent or cruel to innocents then that will most likely slowly bleed over into how you how they treat those close to them. Also for the reasoning behind it feeling forced, while Nora has expressed feelings for Logan, Logan has his oath (that is pretty hardline that he won't take anyone else - not like Davis who said he would do it with consent). In addition to that, Claire has her own hangup with already being in a relatively sizeable harem (sure, small for imperial standards, but not the relationship she was expecting). I could understand the, "I feel guilty for mistreating Nora since she was innocent." However, to follow that plan, you are either expecting Nora to suffer with her family being killed off or for a long, winding road in which Logan breaks his oath per the plan would require and convincing Claire to spare Nora's family which would be a betrayal of her emotions until Claire just rolls over because she is hopelessly in love with Logan. (I'll admit I was that the whole Claire coming around to the harem with Davis's plan was another thing that just shattered suspension of disbelief for me.) This could very well be flawed reasoning because I don't know how the author will handle the situation, all reasoning is flawed when not all the details are known. (Also as a joking aside, technically all the relationships are "forced" in the sense that it is a work of fiction and the author controls the fates of the characters/relationships :) )

it is forced because it would involve claire deciding to allow Logan to take another woman. and while yes there was like one sentence of her realizing that a harem might not be so bad seeing the harmony of her davis' harem. logan has consistently shown an inability to balance that. not to mention how inconsistent claire has been for her revenge with her willing to just return home and happily be with her children. also pointing out that he is a hypocrite does not showed flawed reasoning. I said that he lacks maturity because he does as he constantly is noticing that his disposition is changing and is worried he will become cruel to even those he cares about. his plans for claire are both damaging to her as now she feels guilty about hurting an innocent nora, instead of trying to guide her family toward a lesser punishment and a potentially amicable ending with the true perpetrators being killed with little consequences. the first plan is to literally make nora love logan more than her own family after knowing the former for less than three months and thinking she wouldn't be against her family dying. however everything I typed was an opinion. so dont really know why i am trying to justify it.

not going to lie. at this point, if the plan is to just force nora into Logan's harem, I hope you just kill her off. her character actually seems decent whereas Logan's character has pretty much been garbage since the early part of the story and the only reason to keep him around is because you'd feel bad for claire. overall your story is pretty decent. the biggest issue is the main character's maturity. he is damning people for something he himself is doing right after he realized that he was making a mistake. preferably you would have claire choosing a third option that would actually show character growth for her and davis.