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Out of all the potential beginnings a novel can have my favourite is the street urchin theif. Not to mention the idea of a medium/seer theif is quite compelling. Although personally I’d say such a story would be better as a more traditional less game oriented story, that’s more personal preference. Making her sound intelligent does come across, although it is a little forced. It might be a bit more engaging if she was overly polite/formal or perhaps spoke with a more childish accent and manner despite her clever wit. Regardless I think its a good book in the making and I’d love to give it a read if you decide to continue it again some day.

Actually ignore me I’m talk out of my ass

I mean a need to please his new benefactor could do the trick to a degree, but even thats a but lacking. I mean he doesnt even understand magic yet not to mention this academy

I’m sort of confused as to why he wants to “reach the top”. I mean is it because of the fairytales he read? Even then thats surely more about being skilled and heroic than being the head of this magick order. I dunno I just feel like he hasn’t really got any motivation beyond being free of servitued and doing Molly proud. Certainly nothing like a dire need or perhaps a deep fasination with magic that would spurr him onward to make such a conviction.

Yo I’m quiet enjoying this novel, but those last two chps made me sad. Each to thier own, but I would have much preferred to experience the world Cypher is in first hand. His relationships, trials and tribulations rather than just being told about them. Its just a bunch of exposition I could have learned over time, rather than a summary of his life so far. Anyway its just some thoughts for if you ever republish. Still liking it and I think you’ve got a gem of a novel 😁