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You're not a bad author, so you made bad choices, for the majority of readers, you could maybe do a rewrite of the fanfic, it has potential, so remove the joke about Merlin's nerf or put the joke and the explanation in the same chapter, give a slightly more serious personality (not that much, but enough to make a difference in the fights) for MC, after all, he's already in the 2nd year of the film and change the nick's plot to something different, or not involve Hermione or any character with divergence from memory that he has a good or affectionate relationship with the MC, and if he wanted to use the same plot, Nick and Hermione could have presented them much later on where Hermione and the MC's relationship is more robust and they are more mature and doesn't have all this drama is necessarily between friends, because of a memory of an alternative lookalike (not even from the future, but from an alternative world), it is my opiniões.

Too much nonsense for me, I'm out, there are better Harry Potter fanfics than this, it doesn't even make the top5. If you want a good read, read the ringmaker or arcane thief.

To answer your question at the end of the chapter, this is not getting better, on the contrary it is getting worse and declining. For someone who has a perfect memory and watched all the Harry Potter the Mc movies, it's either very stupid or the author doesn't have enough cells to do something decent, even after 100 caps it seems that instead of growing up the Mc just gets dumber and useless

weak fight, and totally forced drama, he could have finished you off with Arlong at the beginning without all this useless nonsense, PS: comments and strange evaluations because he doesn't have any negative ones, I believe the author is deleting them.

another piece of plot armor that the author makes to have a reason to expose the forgotten temple, the elves the ex already put in it once, it's obvious he's going to do it again. Aahhhh it had started so well, now it's going downhill.

The story was good until it got to that part. My god, how stupid and useless for someone who spent 4 days preparing. It seems that it has become a trend for authors to invest in progress, their protagonism regresses, especially intelligence, if it was at the beginning when he created the base it would be possible to understand, but after everything he went through and the information acquired ahhhhh chains of traps, the call to retreat when he discovered there was a lack of information or even a simple guerrilla fight when he activated a berserker-like mode. So much for someone who was first in theory at school.

More more more chapter!!!!!

I went looking for silver and found gold, great story

QI MC negative, Story with forced plots (the villains discovered MC's identity faster and easier than the police, if it's not forced, I don't know what it is and if I doubt it, it took less time than siheld too) and cliche,"villain kidnaps MC's relative" , which is not the first time, and the MC with all the power and system does not have the ability to protect them.

F history

It's so serious lol because of all the up and burst in Harry you just throw it all in the trash just to do the same thing as in the original and by Ron. ahhhhh so the system and fanficn then just puts the story of the original harry potter.

Harry QI is negative

Meehh history nonsense

mana infinity lol

Yes, but the question is why make him angry? it was no longer efficient to just control him without making him angry.

F novel, Drop+1

É por isso que esse romance é decepcionante, mais um que autor não tem capacidade suficiente e tem que nerf MC.

Uma palavra : decepcionante.