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It was safe and familiar. There were no monsters or slavers… well, at least officially. There was no constant fear of torturous death.
Shadow Slave
Fantasy · Guiltythree
Laser cut diamonds already exists, though it does use a jet of water to guide the laser, essentially its the laser that's cutting the diamond.
"What we are using is a highly powerful laser that shoots a single beam of 12 petawatts of energy that lasts five seconds per shot. Thanks to how advanced technology has become, we are now able to use laser technology to directly cut extremely tough and durable materials such as monster parts and even diamonds. Because of how tough the outer layer of a steel-plated rhino is, we can only resort to using lasers to remove its skin"
The Author's POV
Fantasy · Entrail_JI
Wow so informative. 'make a detailed report on how monster parts are processed'
"As you can see, this is how we process monsters"
The Author's POV
Fantasy · Entrail_JI
"You wouldn't understand," Edward said and Andrew nodded.
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann
Nah mate but the quality of these is going down fast. I've been on this platform since like 5-6 years I think.
(Author's note: This will be explained later on)
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
That just means that the readers are toxic and authors not very capable and confident in their abilities. Most readers understand that the author is human and can make mistakes.
(Author's note: This will be explained later on)
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
I understand that you want to build the world around our MC a little more and there are details that can help you do that. But there times in your novel when some things just feel out of place. Like this line about the scientists. Was it necessary to include it right now? You can do world building sure, it's definitely interesting to read about a completely unique world that someone has created, however, there is a way to do that differently in a more natural way rather than just stating things and 'telling' us. Show it to us. Through the actions of the character, the dialogue between the characters, the different interactions that the MC has with the world around him. I don't expect much from authors on webnovel since it is a webnovel and a lot of authors don't have English as their first language and its hard for them to express themselves and there's not a lot of editing and proof reading going on. But these are just good writing practices.
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The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
A little even I can imagine you know. Attaining power after being oppressed for so long has a lasting effect but it does take time I think. It can't be this instant. I know the author wants to progress his character but sometimes forcing it is not the answer.
'For all those years of suffering you all have inflicted on me, I shall make sure I collect compensations!'
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
I just had this thought. If dust contains dead skin. Then wouldn't this thing incinerate the skin of the whole person? Hmm maybe that's too exaggerated. Maybe this can be like a beauty treatment to remove dead skin from your body.
Every form of dirt right to the last particles would be incinerated by the light.
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
Bro cutting is like one of the most important foundations of cooking. I will gladly accept these shameful skills if he doesn't want them.
At first, when Gustav started these shameful notifications would pop up in his line of sight.
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
Don't keep adding notes my dude. Just be confident in your writing and show it to us instead of telling us.
(Author's note: This will be explained later on)
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
See this. This is what I'm talking about author. You showed us why he is the way he is. Please do that more. Not just labelling him dumb so that all the readers hate him. No one wants to read about someone they hate. They would rather read about someone they sympathise with.
There was even a time when he was beaten up inside the elevator. He preferred not to make contact with the others.
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
A welcome change I must say. HOWEVER, it just doesn't fit the cowardly, stupid, clumsy MC that the author has built until now. He can't even think straight and went for revenge directly? Does realising that you have power instantly change your outlook in life?
'For all those years of suffering you all have inflicted on me, I shall make sure I collect compensations!'
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
Exactly. Any development at this point would be considered character development when you start at rock bottom. This is probably just to make it easier for himself/herself to write.
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The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
Bro I don't care if there is a reason for that or not. As a reader when I'm reading a chapter I should not have to go to the bloody paragraph comments to find a reason for what's in the STORY. That's just bad writing. If you can't explain the reason right now then don't mention it now. The amount of frustration a reader goes through when they see dumb stuff like this is what makes them drop the novel. Authors should justify their choices through the story and not the comment section. Hopefully this happens in novel and I don't have to find the reason for stuff happening in the STORY in the COMMENT section. It just breaks the immersion completely. Reflect on it.
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The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
This is said by the people in the mafia? The irony.
But what about now? She just looks like a bandit!
I Become Baby Mafia Boss
Fantasy · Zehell2218
It's not a mere month though. 0.001/hr means it takes her 1000 hours just for 1 point and that means 20k hours for all 20. Which is about 2.2 years. If I did the math correctly that is.
Mana regeneration: 0.001mp/hr
Bloodline Evolution System: Reign of the Dragon Snake
Fantasy · Yolohy
Yep. But I'm waiting on my pay. I do like supporting authors. I guess you guys don't get much when we use the fast pass?
As a former child star during her second life, that was one of the things that Neoma learned. Thanks to that, she was able to charm adults and children alike. If she was able to convince 9,999,999 million people to follow her on her social media platform, using her charisma to a duke shouldn't be that hard.
Royal Secret: I'm a Princess!
Fantasy · sola_cola
is it Amelia or Amanda? can you decide on one bloody name?
White Online
Games · Alekzi