Alright, and I like the story so far very entertaining. Keep going.
ch 38 C37 Selfishness
Book&Literature · BrownAmerican
Nice chapter. But MC is really troubling, 1. He is half Phoenix, as bird he should be more comfortable in air then on ground, but still acceptable as can leave as a plot hole for future. 2. But as he is half beast half human with increased strength how could he have a weak grip , when I danger of life and death body performance increases more than two folds. This shows MC sometimes has high strength and some times he is as weak as a normal child which is totally random and looks forced to fit the story line. 3. Also how could he has slower speed then toy brooms even if he is not serious. THIS IS A COMMENT TO ONLY SHOW SHORT COMINGS IN CHARACTER I AM NOT TELLING YOU TO CHANGE ANYTHING IN STORY LINE AND CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT :
ch 38 C37 Selfishness
Book&Literature · BrownAmerican
Nice touch on your skills of tea etiquette Miss quinn.
ch 25 C24 2 Weeks Later
Book&Literature · BrownAmerican
I think runes always have limitations of materials.such as First--Ink (type of magic liquid can be replaced by an Almighty brush). Second--paper or thing it is inscribed on. (If material is of low quality, high level rune will destroy it. Such as, infinite something on human body that cannot bear the pressure. Also quality of material determine number of runes that can be inscribed on as well as quality of ink represent time limit of rune. ) There are other factors author can decide by himself on limitations, but this are the basics that are mentioned in every novel as well as fan-fics. P. S. -It's a constructive note author can use it as a reference or may ignore as it's his novel I will not dislike it. As I am here to read a good story with authors own creativity and work, not how I want story to be.
ch 14 14—Hunger pangs
Video Games · LazykidwithaBeard
More komi San moments. Should have to be the main storyline.
ch 43 Future Son In Law
Anime & Comics · Charlottes
Please add Kaichou wa maid sama
ch 43 Future Son In Law
Anime & Comics · Charlottes
Well training is alright but, Senjus hates Uchihas and Uchihas hate Senjus, maybe disowned by his whole clan for this. Unless he is strong enough already. Also, why help Sakura learn to fight. She friggin punched Kaguya on head at last even without him, what difference does it make. And I'm more on Hinata's favor girl is already too weak and won't get any power ups in whole series, she has heart and will but no good teacher (legendary) maybe a super op dojutsu user may help her in her endeavors.
ch 10 Reflection on Past and Plans for Future
Anime & Comics · ForgottenLife
By the way I like this story it's just a constructive remark. You can ignore if you want.
ch 10 Reflection on Past and Plans for Future
Anime & Comics · ForgottenLife
Well author, you should change a mistake in your story it's that mc is pure uchiha so he can't have traits like black eyes with golden pupils and black hair with blue tint. As every uchiha child has a trait that they have pure black pupils (while sharingan is closed). And spike dark black hair. Similar to hyuga straigth black hair and pupiless eyes. Conditions: pure blooded uchiha or hyuga. If not you can change however you want.
ch 10 Reflection on Past and Plans for Future
Anime & Comics · ForgottenLife
Alphas are nothing but proud weaklings. Like mob bosses. They never treat others as above them.
ch 0 4 Chapter 4
TV · Stone_Grey
Dude tigers are loners, no pack, no group, no duo. Majestic living alone.
ch 0 4 Chapter 4
TV · Stone_Grey
Well versed well done. The best **** wolf fan fic I have read till now. Characters sound very original like, MC has personality of troubled **** similar to original **** wolf series character. No stupid OP MC with all knowing of what will happen. ~my thought not advice~ Looking forward for him to make friends with other characters and relationship development. And maybe a GF other than main characters of **** wolf like Lydia, Kira or malia. Since tigers are loner in nature maybe he will be like officer hellhound. All in all please keep up the good work.
ch 0 4 Chapter 4
TV · Stone_Grey
Good work. Please continue to work hard good flow , grammar and story keep going and release more frequently otherwise the original edge may get loose and story will turn boring.
ch 0 2 [2] — Skill and Pill
Crossover: Anime System
Anime & Comics · Nanaka