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I'm honestly stuck on "kate". At one point in the previous chapter you even put "Kate Bishop" but I thought it was Katherine Anne "Kitty" Pryde?? So she goes by kitty not kate??? I don't know if kate is a comic thing but it's honestly confusing me. But maybe that's just me. Otherwise really love the story so far.

I thought this would be interesting but this is basically Harry Potter set in his father's Era. I thought it was OK at the start but the plot is literally pulled from the original story: - attacked by death eaters at the quidditch world cup, - long time to find a wand that ends with mc being told how powerful it is and how great things are expected of him, - gets sorted into gryffindor after chanting not slytherin (after showing off MC's intelligence and only vaguely mentioning an interest in pranks), - a race that ends by the whomping willow where MC isn't punished and gets to have his broom in 1st year (with a slight change so he gets on the team next year). This isn't even considering the MC's personality. We have MC saying in the beginning that he was reluctant to hang out with his new friends because they act their age (and are therefore immature) but immediately has his personality devolve after the introduction of Sirius Black. All this talk about how smart he was in his past life and how he could read people so well but suddenly he's a rude, inconsiderate, immature 11 year old with anger issues, who jumps into situations with no thought, no caution and no plan. What was even the point of giving him that background?! To explain why he knows french??? I have so many complaints because I honestly had high expectations but this just really disappointed me. I hope this doesn't keep following this trend as I really like the concept but I did not go looking for fanfiction to basically reread Harry Potter with minor changes to account for James Potter's (not the MC but the original) personality.

I am officially dropping this. I was already getting tired of MC constantly researching in his lab with no major interactions while the plot progressed as normal. Now even when he intervenes somehow the story still reverts to canon. The MC has no friends, no relationships, barely even interacts even with the Avengers themselves and somehow despite being Tony's son chooses Team cap instead of doing the normal thing from the beginning and telling his dad in advance so he can come to terms with it gradually. Do you have no understanding of human emotions? If that was you, is that actually what you would do if you woke up one day as Tony Stark's son?

Glad I waited. Was worried for nothing lol. Good story, great chapter, looking forward to where you take the story. Keep up the good work. [img=recommend][img=update]

I haven't seen that one unfortunately but i did read up on it just now so i will just look forward to whatever you write next.

I thought the infinity stones only work in their specific universe? Even if two ultrons get all the infinity stones in their universe and manage to leave their universe, shouldn't the stones they have become useless in a new universe? Like how in Loki the TVA just had tons of them but loki couldn't use the space stone to escape?

This isn't a self-insert, so Tony and Natasha may not even know about any of that as they hadn't known Bruce (Hulk) yet. They mostly likely just saw the fight and aftermath like everyone else.

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And with that, I'm done. Having him PLAN to sacrifice himself? The powers in the village are a deterrent, how do you justify him DYING being able to stop a war? Especially as you literally just showed how they still have the upper hand if he and Mito actually start to take part in the war. As much as I loved reading this, that was just way too much of a forced narrative just to keep things in line with the original storyline.

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It should be "my son was about to be born" or "my wife was about to give birth". As it is it kinda reads as though his son was about to have a kid. Otherwise its fine though.

What is the point of having an Uchiha father if she can't use ninjutsu? Why can't she use taijutsu when it's just techniques to fight hand to hand? Even Rock Lee who could barely access his chakra can use taijutsu so why not her? It feels like you wanted to nerf her and just made up a reason halfheartedly. Besides if she is using actual elements when she uses the techniques BECAUSE of chakra, isn't that practically ninjutsu? Just that she'd be forming them through sword movements instead of hand signs?

Shukaku is his name. Its one tail or ichibi not shukaku tail.

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Less elaborate rukia? I honestly thought you took it from esdeath (akame ga kill). Still awesome though.