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Begging for a system despite pretty much being god and being able to create what he wishes. The first thing he does is begging for a system like a loser. I dont know why this annoys me but for this alone im going to drop the novel.

The only thing I want to say is that dont make the harem to big. Harems are already trash but your story is decent enough for me to ignore it. In my opinion harems ruin every story because its is so forced and unneeded just to satisfy the authors fantasy. Just dont have a pokemon collector where the mc collcts every girl to walk the earth.

Jean and Wanda are perfect for Queens because of their powers. Siduri can be a good queen for the story as well if you develope her character.

Why do you give her such big disadvantages? Despite having a system and being the main character she has no advantage over any of the other characters. She litterally cant even cultivate to a high lvl because her talent is so trash. How is she going to be strong? This is the make it or break it part of the story that will determine if I stick with the novel.Nothing is more annoying then seeing a weak mc with no chance of getting stronger constantly getting f**ked by the story with no wins. Im not some sadist who loves seeing the mc in a constant losing situation. Author you need to balance the carrot and the stick not just the stick. She needs to have a power up that can at the very least keep up with those arround her.

Am I the only one feeling annoyed with Sif? Sonething about her character is just really annoying every since she joins Layla. It doesnt help that she is just a muscle brained jealous girlfriend as well. I love everything else about the story so far and despite how stupid Layla can be I don't really feel any annoyance there.

If the goddesses doesnt get punished at the end of this im going to drop.

Are we going to forget that the MC just got replaced? Or in this case going back to the original. Is our previous just gone now until she inverse again?

I cant bring my self to feel sorry for the mc. You did a poor job explaining the issues she is going through and i feel that they are not really issues at all. Whatever problems she is going through are not problems at all and you wrote it really poorly so I cant really feel sorry for her at all.

I thought this chapter would have told me something but nope. She has litterally no reason to leave her house and up till now I loved the novel but this single handedly made me drop a star because of how forced it was. All in all meh.

Ok this seems very interesting so far and im willing to give this a shot. Author for all that is good in the world dont make this a harem and if you dont know how to write romance dont add any at all. People seem to think you need romance or harem in every story for it to be good my god.

This mc is pretty meh. Also he has only known her for a short amount of time so calm down? This whole story so far is just nonsense.

Another system fanfiction? My honest thoughts are systems are just lazy writing and a sign of a amateur author that needs it as a crutch because they dont have the skill to write the plot and make the story flow. This is by no means meant to be hating on the author I just hate systems in stories because like I said, they are lazy writing and for the most part just used to force the plot and characters into decisions that the author doesnt know how to write himself.

System with punishment's? Yea nope

Really? I find it far easier to imagine something that that outrageous then imagining yourself as some hero in a story. Its fantasy do its supposed to be unrealistic in the first place. Are you supposed to imagine some modern day basoc dude as the mc in a Fantasy world? Its super cringe if you want to escape your harsh reality by self inserting yourself into these stories. Authors should really just create a character with their own looks and personality like every decently written story.

How can I be immersed in a story of I imagine myself killing dragons and usong magic or what not? I never unserstood the concept of self-insert and frankly hate the idea of it. Just thought of imagining yourself as some hero in a story doing god knows what is cringe as heck. We are not kids anymore and I prefer to read a story with an actual character instead of some 'think of your own mc' type of bs.

Here goes another fan fiction that ruins itself because the author cant keep it in his pants. Another girl, another simp target and more character development thrown out the door.