Fantasium - Profile

40 chapters in, my overall rating is 3.7 Writing Quality - 3.4 Often clumsy and awkward, the author seems young and inexperienced, resulting in the dialogue being less than believable. It is easy to read, however, and maybe the author will grow over time. Story Development - 3.7 I'll give the benefit and put it at 4. The story isn't anywhere near the level of plot developments you see in Shadow Slave, but it has the potential to be an enjoyable read. It's a bit simple but more enjoyable than the usual cultivation novels, which focus too much on cultivation at the expense of a story, where the cultivation becomes the story. World Building - 3.8 Right now, the magic system is far too simple and not very well constructed. But I imagine that in over a thousand chapters, it will inevitably evolve and grow so I just have to give it a chance Characters - 3.8 I like the ruthlessness, but the character suffers from bad writing quality. I wish the author wouldn't constantly have the character think about how much he loves his family and would do anything to protect them. Instead, he should describe his feelings towards the situations and developments. Instead of having him declare his thoughts, explain that he felt worried, panicked, or concerned about a danger or a threat looming in the forest so close to where his family lived. A threat that has already injured, maimed, or killed experienced hunters could at any time burst out and pose a danger to his own family if left alone. Instead of declaring his thoughts about his sick sister, say that his heart ached to see her coughing in pain, to see her frail figure who couldn't go outside to play like all the other kids, and to see the worried faces of their parents to see her live like that, as well as the resolve and determination he felt in wanting to create a cure. Show, don't tell. Stability of Updates - 5 There are over a thousand chapters, so I'll give full credit to the author. in this aspect.

40 chapters in, my overall rating is 3.7 Writing Quality - 3.4 Often clumsy and awkward, the author seems young and inexperienced, resulting in the dialogue being less than believable. It is easy to read, however, and maybe the author will grow over time, I hope. Story Development - 3.7 I'll give the benefit and put it at 4. The story isn't anywhere near the level of plot developments you see in Shadow Slave, but it has the potential to be an enjoyable read. It's a bit simple but more enjoyable than the usual cultivation novels, which focus too much on cultivation at the expense of a story, where the cultivation becomes the story. World Building - 3.8 Right now, the magic system is far too simple and not very well constructed. But I imagine that in over a thousand chapters, it will inevitably evolve and grow so I just have to give it a chance Characters - 3.8 I like the ruthlessness, but the character suffers from bad writing quality. I wish the author wouldn't constantly have the character think about how much he loves his family and would do anything to protect them. Instead, he should describe his feelings towards the situations and developments. Instead of having him declare his thoughts, explain that he felt worried, panicked, or concerned about a danger or a threat looming in the forest so close to where his family lived. A threat that has already injured, maimed, or killed experienced hunters could at any time burst out and pose a danger to his own family if left alone. Instead of declaring his thoughts about his sick sister, say that his heart ached to see her coughing in pain, to see her frail figure who couldn't go outside to play like all the other kids, and to see the worried faces of their parents to see her live like that, as well as the resolve and determination he felt in wanting to create a cure. Show, don't tell. Stability of Updates - 5 There are over a thousand chapters, so I'll give full credit to the author. in this aspect.

Writing Quality is definitely one of the shining highlights of the story. It is deeply satisfying to read a genuinely well written story. Story Development - The author is basically Weaver. Such an amazingly complex and intricate plot makes you sit on the edge of your seat and has you working to unravel the mystery. It's especially rewarding when you get things right. It is a testament to the author's skill that he is able to lay out subtle and clever hints to foreshadow twists and turns yet still leave you stunned when they happen in a narratively satisfying way. Character Design - The characters are extremely well fleshed out and intelligent. (Even too intelligent, perhaps, but I don't have a problem with it.) If there is any problem, it's only that I wish there were more characters and more dialogue. What he has done with the characters is spectacular, so I desperately want more interactions between a wider cast of characters. Though I wonder if it would even be practical with such a deep, measured, and complex story to add more to it, because the story might never end. And yet, characters are what breathe life into the story and their lives are the most interesting part. Their character development and life are the reward for all the tribulations they have to survive and endure; it's really the prize of the story. The World Building is awesome, well fleshed out, and neatly fits into the story. I only wish the characters weren't like a solitary island detached from the world but more immersed in it. I don't know about Stability of Updates, since I read everything in a couple of weeks, but as far as I know, the author is churning out chapters like a Slave Worker. So I'll give that a 5. At the end of the day, since I'm not willing to give anything a 4, I have to give everything a 5.