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É impossível uma fanfic chinesa ser boa não sei nem porque ainda tento. é essa é uma das piores pois a avaliação alta é bot, isso aqui é puro lixo

Actually, in the beginning, it's quite good, but the MC's personality seems like that of a 3-year-old throwing a tantrum. Initially, the Chinese style isn't unbearable, but after approximately 50 chapters, it becomes intolerable. I know it's a translation, but it's just a waste of time. The most pathetic part is the MC saying that those who use power to force a woman are scum, yet he has this power and uses it passively on EVERYONE.

The majority of positive reviews must be bots, because it's not possible, there's simply no story, there's no plot, there's no meaning, there's nothing, the worst part is that the beginning tricks you into seeming like a good thing but over time it only gets worse.

80 / 5.000 Sharingan reads movements, increases perception, things like that, not GPS

That was the problem, without some details you killed the whole story, what are you doing there and giving a summary of what you wanted to follow, but the story has no

Generally I criticize the story a little and point out some flaws here and there, but this one gave a new meaning to the expression plot hole, in less than a day he arrives in Orario and uses genjutsu to get in, I don't know why he finds information on the street. Astrea family and goes to floor 30 of the dungeon, not to mention the fight that is a dead narrative "I used a failed attack, I used a second attack it worked" end of the fight. I didn't even continue reading because wow, this story doesn't even have room for improvement, it doesn't have character development, relationships, the story itself, so author, I suggest you start rewriting this story and improve these flaws because instead of a story it seems like I'm reading a summary from wikipedia.

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Taking into account that the MC is a hentai, it wasn't too bad, I agree that it's repetitive and there isn't much interaction in the group chat, but it can be improved if the author cares about the story and at least the parts with adult content are not very long, the biggest problem is the lack of group chat interaction, but this is because the author is focusing on many things in parallel and sometimes it gets confusing because time stops when there are missions and at least the missions have a bit of story and the changes to the main story weren't that bad, and I think that compared to most of the rubbish on this site with a group chat theme and a hentai protagonist this one is actually good

Honestly, I expected more for the group chat type of fanfict, but to use several hentai worlds already killed the story, not to mention that the hentai have no logic at all, which makes it difficult to adapt, which the author was clearly unable to do, probably it's going to be a porn fanfic of a hentai, chapter one was already horrible protagonist with no charisma basically he's a jojo guy in Japanese high school, if you came looking for a good group chat fanfic like me this story is not for you, you can Maybe in the future it will be good, but with a start like this I doubt that most people will be excited to continue reading, this protagonist is more emotionless than the one from Sis-Con with Dimensional Chat Group, this is also one that is not good but it is worth it spend time reading

This story is very good, there are a few errors here and there but nothing too serious and it could be the translator's fault, other than that it's an excellent story, at least until chapter 49, after that the first mission of the system begins, that's where there's a problem, not the quality of the writing but the story, I read until chapter 71 and I hadn't finished this shit it's still the worst and nothing interesting happens you can just skip this part there's just unnecessary conversation and the MC getting arrogant for no reason, but the worst part is the dialogue, it's not that it's bad but the timing and the delay is bad more than 20 chapters a mission and only 5 chapters would finish it the rest even has a little story but it's just a waste of time.

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