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Basically: the author copies parts of the original material, only changing Nie Li to his SI. Difficult to read, as grammar is screwed beyond recognition.

Fine, I will delete this review

Because I give 2 stars on average

In the latest chapters the story becomes UNREADABLE

Webnovel/Qidian doesn't make any sense, it's garbage. So, don't try understanding any of it.

I don't even know wth I'm reading. Hogwarts? What? This is just some random CN garbage mixed with some western magic, it makes no sense whatsoever.

Confusing verb tenses, changing from formal to informal speech, suddenly interacting with the readers, etc.

Interesting, but style and grammar are not the author's forte. His writing style is all over the place, falling prey to traps like "But that's a story for another time." Also, the main character doesn't seem to behave like a wise sage would.

Do you realize that whatever you said makes no difference in the story and has nothing to do with my comment?

For some further reading, refer to "Stream of Consciousness" or "Flux of Consciousness." It is an advanced narrative tool - to be handled with care. The most prominent styles involve dumping it in the middle of a scene - generally in stories told by omniscient narrators contamined with a character's viewpoint. Like the name implies, it is a fast, loosely structured and - oftentimes - explosive stream of thoughts from a character, presented by the narrator. You can see why this is bad for a story to be written solely in it, and with incomplete characteristics at that. Most novice authors do that without perceiving.

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How am I supposed to show you if you are the one writing the story, makes no sense.

I read just the first chapter, which does not impede me in any way from writing a review. The thing is, if you feel the need for your prologue to be an info-dump, you are probably -read as definitely- doing something wrong. Not to say the vocabulary problems present after the "world building," or "background," as you stated; too many repetitions of "the fatty," "the man," "the three men," which takes a huge chunk out of imersion. The story seems bland, you are not showing, you are telling.

Not worth the time. The story is expositive, info-dump quality, "There are bajillion continents, the bajillions continents have these countries here that I will give you the names, and they are like that and blahblah." Still wondering up to this date what an "Ais" is.

Blitzed through it. The grammar gets worse as time goes on. The author is clearly not experienced enough to write a story with billions of different POVS. Bazillions of unrelated and useless "AUTHOR NOTE"s throughout the story makes everything insufferable.

Low control of the scene, the author constantly writes "Then this happens. Next that happens. Then the man thinks that. Ant then the other man does that." The author has nil knowledge on how realistic interactions feel like, and on how people react to certain things, to the point that war vets have the mindset of five year old children.

Ok, I have no idea what happened here, I never read this novel, this review was meant for a whole different story. I have no idea how it ended up here. Well, typical Webnovel bug. Now I have no idea which fic this review was written for.

Lackluster. The chapters are monotonous, there are more dialogues and system prompts than actual storytelling. The worldbuilding is confusing. The author does not have a satisfying vocabulary, he keeps saying "the fog makes the world gloomy" every two chapters or so. Not worthy a read.