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Moments 24
Was it safe for Qin Yi to use the sword when he was attacked? He was exposing his wealth a little there
ch 51 The Target Is More Vicious
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To author:Can´t you go to royalroad and post there it´s a friendly site and you can still put there a patreon for donations for example Beware of the Chicken came out there six months ago and caught attencion on the rising stars and favorite of the week and now its doing great on patreon with only a chapter ahead on patreon
ch 49 The Child of Void
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Quick question when he goes in the garden does he disappear or it just his mind that makes a pseudo-body there?
ch 48 Two Little Gluttons Come Out
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Im lost where did the Dragon Cave come from?
ch 46 Concocting Qi Strengthening Pills
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The srtuff of using his secret treasure to carry the logs is a bit dumb why did he just carry them normaly it wont waste much time
ch 44 I Acted Courteously, But You..
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"Calmed his back" is this right?It sound a little weird to me
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To author: Maybe change to "What a joke."
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Maybe change:"one point is that they want to find out what caused the Rejuvenate Pond to change."
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To author: Maybe remove the 'Not' if your meaning is even a few of the disciples that were outside the sect returned to look at the pond :)
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To author:Maybe put some 'a' in there like "Rejuvanate Pond Can Rejuvanate 'a' Person
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To author: Nice thinking on making the power on the stone not permanent its a nice touch :)
ch 24 Constructing a Lake in Mystical Garden
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Maybe remove the part: a slamming sound. I think the sentence will become clearer without it.
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Lol ok that one was good :)
"Oh god, after drinking this water, my thirst disappeared immediately. Miraculous!"
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Maybe change: received 'a' sword slash in my hand during the duel
"It was real! That crazy dude is not lying! The wound on my hand healed. I received the sword slash in my hand during the duel, but it healed quickly after drinking the water from this pool."
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To author: Thank you for listenning to my input it feels nice to be heard I just saw the addiction to the story and it feels better to me, but I'm just curious could you answer by comment about why did he want to test the effect of the stone like that? It's just a bit of curiosity the story is good i just wanted a behind-the-scenes comment :)
ch 21 Pool Experiment
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To dear author: I think you should change the ending of this chapter because you already said that he wants to be low-key and doesn't want to attract attencion to his cheat but making him throw the rock he just made in a pond people pass by all the time makes him seem kind of stupid and against his character maybe make him test it by putting it in water inside his storage or maybe inside that new space treasure that would make more sense
ch 21 Pool Experiment
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Error: *as the
It was the same as the Warding Ghost Necklace, neither did he know what it was and how to use these three kinds of talismans, nor did he have any knowledge of talismans.
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Error: *within
—And he did that a lot in the Novices' Quarter. Fortunately, the space wiithin the system's storage was unlimited, so he did not have to worry that it would take up a lot of space.
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Since The Red Moon Appeared
Sci-fi · Ghost of Dark Mountain