guard *came
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every person* or people not every people
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this whole chapter is a mess I barely understood what was happening.
Unfortunately, I don't have many opportunities to talk with my brothers. Furthermore, my second and third sons often avert their gaze when I see them occasionally. I guess I can't say they are close.
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child* soldier
Perhaps it was because he was able to fight decently with the boy soldiers, but now it seems that such a rumor has spread among the soldiers.
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samurai?
Well, it's like samurai, where you fight with a light shield and a soft stick. The first one to hit his opponent with the stick wins, and that's the gentle rule.
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this event is confusing
The two maids had serious eyes. Their faces were smiling, which made them look sober and scary. Till is frightened like a lie by her cheerfulness up until a while ago.
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7*
"Five, five fingers"
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each hand?
"..... So, seven in each hand. What if I reduce it by two?"
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my* father
Espada is apparently a capable butler who has supported his father for many years. I've never talked to him before, but from the looks of it, he seems to be very good at his job. However, he is scary.
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had* led
By the way, the country I'm in right now is the Kingdom of Scuderia, a large country in the southern part of the Grant continent. The king's name is Dino En Zhora Berlinate. The Berlinate royal family, which has been in existence for three hundred years, has been gradually expanding its land, and the current king has led the Count of Jalpa and other armed nobles to invade one small country and gain new land. At that time, my father was raised to the rank of Marquis.
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there might be age issues I thought he was 5 and Marcia was 15, 10 year gap. 8 and 18 was there too. but now it's 2 and 14? is it just me?
They eat only twice a day, once before noon and once at night after the sun has gone down. Murcia, the eldest son, is already fourteen years old, and he's busy with practical training in the field as if he were an adult.
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our* father
Suddenly, his father asked Yardo. Maybe it's a noble custom, or maybe it's just the way it is with kids, but basically kids don't do anything in the morning. From noon onwards, they are educated according to their age and learn things like sword fighting.
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were*
"Uh, no, no, no! Thank you for listening! And by the way, Master Van! What are you doing over there..."
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twilight? sunset? it's not completely dark than, is it.
I walked through the completely darkened city. The city is still bright, but the light will gradually fade.
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why does he keep using his name "Van" instead of "you" maid * Till
"Van has always been a strange child. I was sensitive to the subtleties of adults' minds and seemed to think more deeply about things. Butler Espada and maid'Till had been happily reporting on Van for a long time."
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who was ten years younger* than him*
When I called out to him, Murcia's smile changed to a sad expression. He walked right up to me, bowed his head and apologized to me, who was ten years older than her.
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I* not he, you're still using first person monologue
However, the result of the appraisal was that he was a production magician, which is considered the lowest level.
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has* his maternal
The eldest son, Murcia, was his maternal grandmother's aptitude for wind magic, but the second and third sons had an aptitude for fire magic, as their father wanted.
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it should be "boys" since he's 1/4 boys. I'm guessing you're trying to say; 1. all 4 boys are Mira's "boys" 2. the other wives only birthed girls.
My mother, Mira, died when I was five years old. He had a second wife and a third wife, but mysteriously it was only my mother who gave birth to a boy.
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lack*
The Evolution of a Goblin to the Peak
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