Joanna_T

1yr

Commented

guerilla warfare. No monkeys spotted in this chapter

Still, the remnants of the more experienced imperial knights proved to be way more of a challenge as they used gorilla warfare and staged a constant string of ambushes taking full advantage of the verticality and densely packed urban terrain which the imperial capital offered. Taking a short and deep breath, an imperial knight slowly stepped out on an interconnecting bridge between two skyscrapers as she readied her longbow and notched a solid metal arrow which had the length of her own arm. About 20 metres below her was a detachment of the invading forces, they moved in the middle of one of the larger roads with an extreme familiarity of fighting within such cramped spaces among civilian populace, little did the imperial knight know, this was their preferred terrain. Glancing around at other nearby buildings, the imperial knight confirmed that her comrades were also in a position to strike against the invaders, then she used a small mirror to observe her opponents on the street below. Two lines of human sized golems surrounded a large six footed monster which slowly but surely made its way towards the imperial castle with what seemed like two humanoid figures leading the way.

Starship commander trapped in a fantasy world

Fantasy · Gamma420

Joanna_T

1yr

Commented

this is the description of eating durian.

Zhang Ye uncontrollably closed his eyes. He swore that this was the most delicious fruit that he had ever tasted. Sweet and creamy, mellow tasting, overflowing with fragrance, full of fat, but not greasy, melts in the mouth, with a lingering taste..... Forget it, I’m not gonna exaggerate. Actually, the taste was just so-so, but if it were not exaggerated, how else could the specialness of the item be expressed? When you watch TV, those cuisine programs’ food critics… Are they not the same? They easily say it melts in the mouth every now and then. Zhang Ye could never understand it in the past. Your sister! A piece of lousy jackass barbecued meat... How the heck could it melt in the mouth!? Did you think you were eating Dove (a brand of milk chocolates)? Zhang Ye could understand now why barbecued jackass meat could even melt in the mouth on TV -- Because this would make it seem f***ing awesome!

I’m Really a Superstar

Urban · Chang Yu

Joanna_T

1yr

Commented

Hmm, say "qiton" aloud. Doesn't it sound like "kitten"?

"he's a qiton not a demon, let him go already"

Starship commander trapped in a fantasy world

Fantasy · Gamma420

Joanna_T

1yr

Commented

should be : ".. and Mark soared through the air onto the street."

"It's for your own good and the good of the world" there was a little shove behind his back, and Mark felt sore through the street right in front of the terrifying noise.

Leave the Monster alone

Fantasy · daygon_yuuki

Joanna_T

2yr

Commented

"at last " should be "alas"

　　At last, there was nothing to see.

Kaito Kid in the World of American Comics

Anime & Comics · RainPalace

Joanna_T

2yr

Commented

"pulse" should be "purse" ...

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System Only Gives Me Useless Gifts (Old)

Urban · chocomug

Joanna_T

2yr

Commented

better to change 'rest room' to 'break room'. in some places, the restroom = toilet

Walking off stage, everyone went to the rest room as the food was served there. Joon-won took a box from the bench and walked to the corner his bag was at before he started downing the box. If anyone from the audience saw him then, they would never think he was the same elegant, cold villain they saw on stage a few minutes prior.

Rebirth: King to Superstar

Realistic · Cruchymonster

Joanna_T

2yr

Commented

definitely not "embarrass". Should change to "embellish"

Jung-hwa took the remote he was handing out and nodded before turning on the TV. Joon-won took out the groceries he got and started cooking up some curry with rice. He took out the meat and went hard on the meal. As he cooked, his thoughts were still on the villain character and how he could embarrass that role better. He knew he had to further analyze it later at night and get a good grip on the character's thought process if he wanted to perform well.