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author, I just noticed that you like Sam to say this line, please refrain from doing so for it's kinda dumb/stupid, and it gives the story a lot of hole on it. 馃構 first, his not that powerful and his enemy are getting stronger the more he moves to the next level, and even though he's supposed to be a genius or that he has a cheat like the tower, he can't always be hiding there isn't it? beside, you can't always put the enemy rooted to the spot for being shocked or caught off guard momentarily in every confrontation for it makes the story more predictable the more that happened, and lastly it makes the enemy stupid for they seemed to always do nothing until Sam got his revenge 馃槕. I just hope you make the enemy much more like a real enemy that have a line like "rid the weed from it's root to prevent it from growing" kind of thing, specially, when Sam is like saying something along the lines of "hey! kill me now or you'll regret it later when I get my revenge." Do you get what I mean? I hope you do. anyway, I'm just giving some advice, so please no offense 馃槈馃槝 after all, I believe having someone to criticize your work can make us more aware of the things that we overlook and improve more 馃槈

If you are, then remember my words, if there is a way for me to find you and reach you, you better kill me before that day comes, or else you would wish you never even saw me on this day."

Re-Birth of a Genius. Creator/Destroyer

Re-Birth of a Genius. Creator/Destroyer

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