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I totally agree with your rant btw. I loved the world of Naruto and many of the characters but I think they messed up big time with the plot holes, power scaling, and many of the other characters(sasuke and Sakura suck). I honestly couldn’t bring myself to get past all the fluff episodes after the pain arc. Since then I’ve just read fanfics for the story that could have been(plus I read far too much and fanfics are free, fun, and don’t require as much brain power if you just want to relax)
ch 13 Chapter 13: Break the Limit! II
Naruto : Frosted Core
Anime & Comics · MoonLight18
Why does that matter to them? It seems to me that they should support any hobby that their kid wants to try….. especially if it’s a relatively low cost one like art(of course that depends on how far they go). He’s still a kid he should be allowed to try things out lol. Anywho I’m just nitpicking great job with the book so far.
"First, if you start you CANNOT quit part way through. I will not tolerate my son being a quitter." Leona spoke with ferocity in her tone. Nothing like her usual sweet and doting demeanor.
High School DxD: Scattered Cherry Blossoms
Anime & Comics · SixthSense1029
Carla’s to much of a simp for my liking. Honestly I hate both of the parents far more than any of the girls. A parents job is to provide unconditional love and protection while teaching their children. It really bothers me to see neglectful parents(especially happy ones) so I kinda want to see them suffer and break apart. Love the book btw just had to get that out of my system.
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Villain Is on Vacation
Fantasy · Madwriter_2377
Well this was a decent read. Unfortunately it seemed to lose direction after the time skip. I don’t really know where this is heading but good luck with it. I really enjoyed the beginning of this book and I’ll be sure to check out any of your future books.
ch 54 Issue #5
Frost's Greed (Marvel)
Anime & Comics · BoredAsura
Spiffing Brit?
ch 0 8 Cat Dad's Game Character is Perfectly Balanced
Cathulhu Online, MUNYA!
Games · DamnPlotArmor
Well I’m not disagreeing with you especially because he’s merely 15 but she probably doesn’t currently see this as romantic and in a world where people can live up to 300 years old a 9 year age difference won’t really matter much in the future.
How can someone be this beautiful!
Parallel Memory
Fantasy · SomDxD
Finally caught up. I’ve really enjoyed the book so far. My only advice is to give Charlotte more personality. Right now her only character point is that she really into the Mc and that’s kinda boring. I want to like her as she seems like a nice women but she’s so dull that I’m having a hard time connecting. It kinda makes the relationship seemed forced(which you sorta addressed in this chapter). Not trying to hate btw just trying to give some constructive criticism. Sometimes authors give a character a big personality in their brain but it doesn’t really appear in their writing.
ch 27 Why did Daddy try to hide his emotions for five years?
My Daughter is a Vampire
Sci-fi · Sabin_Subedi_Fei
This is a bit weird. She should be able to join regardless of having two parents unless it’s a birth record thing and charlotte wouldn’t have that anyway. Even if they hack the system and make it show her as the birth mother it’s a bit unfair to her as it’s then on her record. Good job on the book so far.
"Royal Academy won't let anyone without both of their parents join. Lily studies at the same academy. And not just her, some of the top superhero children study there as well. Your identity inside the school will no longer be Elenor Bathory. Your name will be Elenor Jackson and your mother's name will be Charlotte Jackson."
My Daughter is a Vampire
Sci-fi · Sabin_Subedi_Fei
I’d be a lvl one hundred bookworm day one of launch
ch 12 You can't scam Daddy
My Daughter is a Vampire
Sci-fi · Sabin_Subedi_Fei
I think it’s a bit out there for them to wind up on a random island with caniblistic savages in this day and age….. plus the fact they can make fire surprises him? Their sentient? Aren’t all humans sentient and I’m pretty sure just about ever primitive group knows how to make fire…. Wouldn’t last long without it. Lol
ch 13 Chapter 13 Poor Anna
The Days to Survive with Several Girls on the Uninhabited Island
Urban · Xuanting_Official
This has been pretty enjoyable so far. I would suggest in the future(if u ever write another time reversal book) not to make it so weighted towards the MC next time. The system explains literally nothing towards newbies apparently. The fact magic/int can’t be trained and magic would be practically impossible to learn without previous knowledge/ a lot of research(maybe) is another. You tend to see a lot of this in time reversal novels but I think it’s better to make the advantages slightly more realistic. I hope you don’t mind my criticism it’s just an opinion and this is a good book so far. :)
ch 14 Magic I
Conquering the Universe with my Sister
Fantasy · Yue_021
Well that whole thing was uncomfortable. I mean even if u assured us that she won’t cheat it’s still pretty unacceptable(going to a party with someone that’s not your significant other especially) unless it’s a open relationship(would still be uncomfortable to read though).
ch 13 Hello! My master
The Supreme Satanic System
Fantasy · The_handsome_fatty
Man…. To commit to a plan for 5 years…. that’s some willpower lol
Jin Tam was ecstatic. Today was Christmas come early! He had only put his plan in place to catch Miss Kim, but to think that she would also bring this idiot here for him! How was he going to thank her!?
Picking Up Beautiful Girls In The Post-Apocalyptic World!
Urban · D_RegalInsomniac
Wheres his SLAP!!!! Infinity!!! Skill?
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The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
Thats why this is so funny lol :)
'You're not a female so I have no qualms with hitting you on the chest!' Gustav thought as his arm traveled with intense force towards Masuba chest.
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
Some people, most certainly. The ratio is likely to fluctuate though. It would depend on many different factors such as culture, upbringing, and status. The problem here is that all we’re seeing is one side(with the exception of the lady teacher). Love the novel so far just couldn’t resist a debate:)
'He must have made use of those drugs again,' Most of them came to this conclusion after thinking about it.
The Bloodline System
Fantasy · TimVic
One of the best Naruto fanfics I’ve read. It hits you hard in the feels early but once you get past that it’s filled with funny banter and a fun spin on Naruto’s character.
Naruto : Frosted Core
Anime & Comics · MoonLight18