No, seems like a Find&Replace misshap with whatever character it was originally.
"Karinnoha ninjas!"
Anime & Comics · Bleam
The guy earlier said it well. Too much in this chapter doesn't add up and seems more like trying to justify things to readers which got convoluted and worse as it went, I posted in one of the early paragraph comments why. You missed good chances to set up internal conflicts for him if he was normal, or set up external ones if he was altered so significantly from modern values after passing through or absorbing essences.
The MC won't get in bed with her because I don't want you to call him a cuck over that. He won't even be interested.
TV · daoistgingerale
Hey man, we all grow and I think you have a great starting point, the whole fantasy thing can be developed. If not necessarily by reading, I think this would be a proper way to use AI, transforming text to fantasy style and picking and chosing what suggestions to build on; in time you won't need it anymore. Also I recommend pretty much anything by RA Salvatore if you want some style inspiration.
How do you like my writing? I have found that unlike other authors, I focus a lot on the dialogues.
Movies · Ax_nevermay_cry
It's quite good balance I think in terms of dialogue and overall a much better way to deliver important aspects such as character personalities and development than describing stuff like other authors (especially stuff like describing that a character was shocked and in pain for 3 days, that really gets me, there's 0 impact to the reader). If there's one particular thing I would say it's that your style is too formal for this type of writing, "he identified a group of orcs" for example feels more like an action report than an immersive novel. To try and illustrate what i mean: "feeling the air shift he quickly sobered from his light dreams and stood peering into the darkness which now held little sway over his eyes. He saw the gangly creatures with bodies as misshapen as the crude weapons they were wielding creeping towards them. 'Orcs!' *fisssht he yelled loosing and arrow into the head of the nearest enemy. The dwarves were quickly roused to their weapons as all those worthy of the company of Thorin oakenshield have fought and trained for years...."
How do you like my writing? I have found that unlike other authors, I focus a lot on the dialogues.
Movies · Ax_nevermay_cry
To quote "father-in-law" Aethyta: Kick 'im the quad!
No, neither did the Krogan. When he tried to put his hand on Samael, the human grabbed his hand, then aimed a kick at the Krogan legs, making him fall to the ground, using his own body weight against him. Before the Krogan could react, Samael aimed a punch at a very specific spot on Krogan to make him pass out in two moves.
Video Games · Pop0
Sedatives
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Video Games · Pop0
Ok.....I'd say that went well.
ch 42 38 – Omega (1)
Video Games · Pop0
Fair point, focusing movie-wise is also probably best, no point in throwing Tom Bombadil into the mix. And it also makes sense then to have all the changes compared to the book lore as it's already a parallel universe of sorts in the movies and they definitely don't cover this level of detail.
Although he was a little disappointed to learn that a few years ago she disappeared and it is not known what became of her, they do not know if she married or had children.
Movies · Ax_nevermay_cry
Well the Romans had sudatoriums for sure, documented and everything. But I do recall seeing articles mentioning finding what looks like a sauna set up, small enclosed space, burnt rock piles and such up in the Orkneys dating back to the bronze age.
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TV · daoistgingerale
There's evidence of saunas going back thousands of years, you can use those, it's likely what they had and employed regularly to stay healthy.
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TV · daoistgingerale
What does "a few years" mean? She was was born towards the begining of the second age, so I'm guessing that if her dissapearance is recent then you interpreted that the choice of fate was passed down beyond Elros, to his children as well. Personally, from what I've seen, this choice only ever seemed to be available to the elven line, once the choice to be mortal is made, descendants only get extended lifetime. Unless of course all that adventuring Tindomiel did somehow brought her the same boon as Tuor to be granted elven fate? Anyway, with Elwing's involvement, which I'm pretty sure somehow breaks Manwe's decree that she would not walk among men and elves outside of Valinor, means that Aldril is clearly a close relative of Elwing and not just a descendant, and if we take Tindomiel as the mother, than him as a great-grandson of Elwing makes sense. Wonder who the father would be. I basically threw all your hints on the side of identifying the mother.
Although he was a little disappointed to learn that a few years ago she disappeared and it is not known what became of her, they do not know if she married or had children.
Movies · Ax_nevermay_cry
Yeah, get all that Longbottom Leaf! I also hear the "salted pork is particularly good" over there.
Just as this thought crossed his mind, the door of the nearest red-roofed house opened. Out stepped a short, stout figure, barely a meter tall, carrying a hoe and dressed in farmer's attire. He was clearly surprised to see Wayne approaching but showed no fear. After observing him for a few seconds, he smiled and asked, "You're a human, aren't you? How did you end up in Hobbiton?"
Book&Literature · LIl_wretch
Norse were very progressive, they anticipated the development of dedicated reception desks.
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TV · daoistgingerale
Huh, 800s Scandinavia seems to have some awesome plumbing...
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TV · daoistgingerale
Aha, there's that post-nut clarity kicking in. Even the ultimate viking isn't immune it seems.
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TV · daoistgingerale
Heh, I like it but it's gotta be said: forced humor is forced, no matter how distracted, he would've noticed panic and destruction spreading around before it got to him, unless all those mutants just decided to teleport at the same time above him, he's in central park so you can't even claim the fight started on a building above.
ch 0 4 Chp. 4 Surprise of two moons
Movies · Bottomlanefeeder27
So given all that, in addition to what the voice said in his head when outlining the result of the wishes, how on earth was he unsure of him being in another world.....
"Uhm, I am not really sure if I came back to the past or went to another world but things I have seem to be pointing out that I am from another world entirely. Mine does not have Stark or Oscorp there at all and from last I remembered I might be the last living human there." Paul still felt sad of the fact he could not be able to see his parents since the time from where he came from meant that they have been dead for a long time.
Movies · Bottomlanefeeder27
Whatever he decides, he'd better get some Hobbit's Leaf before leaving!
Just as this thought crossed his mind, the door of the nearest red-roofed house opened. Out stepped a short, stout figure, barely a meter tall, carrying a hoe and dressed in farmer's attire. He was clearly surprised to see Wayne approaching but showed no fear. After observing him for a few seconds, he smiled and asked, "You're a human, aren't you? How did you end up in Hobbiton?"
Book&Literature · LIl_wretch
I wonder if he'll manage to finish off Bendak before Nevar wakes up. Gonna be interesting, The Mysterious Tyson vs. The Mysterious Stranger!
ch 14 Season 1: Episode 5.1 - Dueling Ring
Movies · Steatoda
Seems good enough to me, it's not meant to be perfect, just some words that escape translation here and there like the wargs.
Is my grammar really so bad as to tell me to write in my native language?
Transmigrate to the world of The Lord of the Rings?
Movies · Ax_nevermay_cry