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There is every indication that a similar entrance to Bansy lies beneath Treves.

I'm not a fan of the Ren*Amanda ship but you manage to convey the feelings well. Nice work. On the other hand, you described the same scene 3 times (The Spectators, The Twins, and Ren), to say exactly the same thing, it's a bit redundant. Please don't turn it into a Chinese novel with artificial word quantities. Thanks for your work.

For a demon who had some authority, it's hard to believe that she could be manipulated like that... In fact that everything having to do with the MC and the world bending over for him is starting to be a bit much for me. Nevertheless, the story despite its many flaws was entertaining, so I'll stick with the adage, the journey, not the destination. Thank you for your work.

Pff... This plot development is terrible writing... Thanks for your work.

I'm quite annoyed by the value judgment of much of the commentary, not to mention the insults on the characters. It remains a fiction but it is always sad in arriving there. Especially concerning the behavior of a character who if he was the MC would be described as a good thing. This commentary just served me expressed my frustration, it is recommended to ignore it. Thanks for the chapter.

I really like Ruby, she is one of those rare characters who, while being linked to the MC, are not inferior to him.

1. Crunch 2. Bawopi 3. Jack 4. Ruby 5. Will

Perhaps. But it should not be forgotten that she is designated as the one with potential by the Oracle. To get rid of it definitively, it would have to be hunted down outside the Cube, which would be a waste of time. It is more interesting to have some control over it and over its construction.

So would you treat her with the same thought that she treated others? How would you be different from her? It is more interesting to make him understand the reality of the "game" which can bring more benefits in the long term.

That they are only 5-7 years old and fighting more or less competently bothers me a bit and undermines my suspension of disbelief. Thanks for the chapter.

Thanks for the chapter. I find it too easy for guards who have served since childhood to turn against authority so easily. That's not how human psychology works. It's a detail, but it bothers me a lot. Likewise the rape that is predominant in your story. While I don't doubt that in such a situation it can exist, it comes up a little too often. That's not what comes naturally to a man when he finds himself in a stressful situation. It appears all too often in your story as the only reason to bring a little horror without any real meaning other than to shock. These are just a few thoughts that came to me when I read your story. You are free to ignore them, you are doing a good job, continue as you wish.