Lillymoon

3mth

Commented

is it miles, Mary, mari. .. why does the director's name keep changing? If you need an editor i can help.I will even do it for free, just so the story remains consistent.

At that time, even the director of the advertising department, Meryl, would not be able to cover up for it ...

Lifetime of Bliss And Contentment With You

Urban · Jiong Jiong You Yao

Lillymoon

4mth

Commented

i am really shocked with all the pronoun mistakes!

Hearing that, Vice - President li glanced at su Cai and chuckled,""There's no mistake. The president personally sent him."

Lifetime of Bliss And Contentment With You

Urban · Jiong Jiong You Yao

Lillymoon

5mth

Commented

something tells me Joan is a spy, something is really suspicious about that woman.

Tom's shocked face mirrored the frustration churning through William. "But how…? How did they even know the arch existed, or what our next move would be?"

Earning the Love of a Princess

History · Gabrielle_Johnson_6482

Lillymoon

6mth

Commented

both have their own insecurities and trust issues, they both need to work out their issues if they truly want this relationship to work. Both of them assuming the other is going to cheat and being possessive is never a good combo in any relationship

ch 198 Chapter 198

He Stole Me From My Deadbeat Husband

Urban · ForeverPupa

Lillymoon

10mth

Commented

umm, wonder if this new entity is a baby?!

"The light will weep with molten fury, a surrender shall awaken a new entity."

The Lycan's Sin

Fantasy · B_Mitchylle

Lillymoon

10mth

Commented

I like the story's atmosphere (setting/mood), it's like a psychological thriller with supernatural elements. Breath of fresh air reading something a little different from other novels on here!! You have tremendous talent!!

ch 11 Offers and Secrets

The Lycan's Sin

Fantasy · B_Mitchylle

Lillymoon

10mth

Commented

For Eve's sake, I would be wary, especially when everyone in her past betrayed her, but then again, people can unexpectedly surprise you! Can't wait to see what happens!

A/N: Do you think Ophelia is an Ally or an enemy? :D

Eve's Gambit

Fantasy · B_Mitchylle

Lillymoon

10mth

Commented

the story wise, is actually pretty good. only suggestion I would advise is for you to get an editor for the mistakes (it will help the story out and keep the readers engaged). Just keep honing your craft and don't get discouraged by the negativity.

ch 11 [S1] 011 Exposed Identity

The Mute Female Knight Disguised As a Man

History · CloudC

Lillymoon

1yr

Commented

wait, wouldn't he see her covered in blood, since her clothes had blood on them too?!

Like a mouse trapped, she watch the Tiger come closer. Too close. Any closer and he will smell the blood.

Unexpected Second Chance at Love

Urban · Abeehiltz

Lillymoon

1yr

Commented

girl, you need to start putting the pieces together then you will realize they all are one in the same

Thus, in the next two games, Shi Yao spent one moment thinking that Legend was Mister Numbers, the next moment thinking that Legend was Lin Jiage, and the next moment, saying that her idol had wronged her, and the next moment that she had accidentally slandered him.

The Beautiful Time With You

Urban · Ye Fei Ye

Lillymoon

1yr

Commented

they are all the same person, that's why they all are similar to you lol

So, her male God had gone from being like Mister Numbers to being like Lin Jiage?

The Beautiful Time With You

Urban · Ye Fei Ye

Lillymoon

1yr

Commented

ohhh, but they are the same!!! can't wait to see his reaction when he finds out the truth

But for some reason, he found himself wishing that Big White Chubby was Soft Bun, and Soft Bun was Big White Chubby...

The Beautiful Time With You

Urban · Ye Fei Ye

Lillymoon

1yr

Commented

I get a sense of foreshadowing. Curious if she is going to switch careers from actress to singer?!

Jiang Yuning had a beautiful dream that night. In her dream, she was holding a concert and the entire place was filled with more than ten thousand people. Lu Jingzhi was sitting at the main guest table and he was looking at her with a smile on his face.